New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?
It is true that modern technologies have altered how the younger generation spend their leisure time. This trend introduces both pros and cons, but I would argue that the drawbacks are more significant.
On the one hand, it is clear that the use of digital devices in free time has some positive impacts on children. Firstly, technological gadgets are highly entertaining for children’s lives. Such devices have eye-catching images or compelling sound effects which are appealing to schoolchildren. Besides, several electronic games offer youngsters rewards encouraging them to keep playing after a hard day at school. Therefore, new technologies afford children the opportunity to relax and temporary escape the tedium of schoolwork. Furthermore, children would probably learn more social skills which are necessary in the modern workplace. When they play games with multiple players, cooperation between their team members enables them to devise strategies to solve their problems quickly. Thus, those gadgets make schoolchildren well-prepared before they leave school.
On the other hand, I believe that there are some obvious negative aspects that would arise. First of all, younger generations would suffer from health risks that are associated with gaming. Because they sit in front of the screen for hours on end continuously, they are prone to myopia. This action also leads to a sedentary lifestyle which causes obesity and heart attack. Another disadvantage is the addiction to modern technologies. Children tend to be obsessed with images of games. As a result, they would lose their attention in their classroom and underperform socially and academically. Certainly, spending a significant amount of times playing games does more harm than good.
In conclusion, I finally hold the view that the drawbacks of using digital tools have stronger effects on schoolchildren than the advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58075601375 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00188688235 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652920962199 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.1090393749 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.4736842105 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3157894737 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42105263158 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221303530559 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589818051086 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570230982623 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125045791199 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601837202573 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.49 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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