People are living longer. Some people think that it causes big problems. Others, however, think the aging population has many advantages for business, government and for society in general. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
The technological civilization has changed all aspects of human's life such as education, transportation, construction, etc. Especially, the medical breakthrough making a dramatic increase in people's age has contributed significantly into lives. Personally, I strongly suppose that there are more drawbacks than benefits in this improvement.
Considering the contribution and happiness, it is comprehensible to make people live longer. Firstly, there is a global advantage that the social welfare will be risen. In addition to increasing in the pool of volunteers, the crimes will be reduced as the old tend to less commit than other generations. Futhermore, the old held uphold morals and values that inspire the youth. For example, stories about life in the war told directly are more interesting than in historical books.
In contrast, the medical care's enhancement presents many challanges. As goverment has to provide enough facilities as well as pension, the tax acceleration is unavoidable. Likewise, the financial burden is also extended while the old do not retire. For instance, the Japanese aging from 60 to 70 are senior citizens in workforce, the competition for work is more severe. Thirdly, the moment the old realize an "artificial face" of life is a nightmare. That means when someone lives longer than others, however, they still haven't found out the aim of life, they would feel scared, worried and unhappy until the end of their life.
In conclusion, it is clear that the downsides of advance in life expectancy exceed its merits. I believe that a short but deep life is more expected than a long but cursory life. Hence, stopping wishing a longer life, live for a deeper life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 26, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cares'' or 'care's'?
Suggestion: cares'; care's
...ical books. In contrast, the medical cares enhancement presents many challanges. A...
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Line 5, column 533, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...longer than others, however, they still havent found out the aim of life, they would f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, likewise, so, still, third, thirdly, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30036630037 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09202208459 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648351648352 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8832216296 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.1176470588 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0588235294 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2352941176 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126608778591 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379741718866 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483553464683 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723031895467 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229373135702 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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