The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend?
The rising portion of youth who are involved with obesity in developed countries over the last decade requires attention. Regarding of that, we need to focus on psychological components of modern lifestyle and the implemented tricks that huge food and beverage companies are widely using them.
By considering the starting points of generation of a dreadful lifestyle among adolescents, the insatiable tendency of families in some foods that are considered harmful is conspicuous. Subsequently, Due to the reason that offsprings imitate their parents's eating habits, they would rather what is predeterminedly accepted to be consumed in meal time . Moreover, With the help of the recent developments of advertising industry, huge brands and franchises are well-equipped with resources that are in aid to create provocative and misleading ads for major companies efficiently. As a consequence, the youngsters will trap in eye-catching appearance of these poor-quality products.
As a result, children who have been deceived by sales gimmick will designate these less-healthful foods in their daily diet. Accordingly ,their lives will be exposed to the various risks including respiratory ailments and cardiovascular diseases. That are more common in people with overweight. Additionally, it will deter them from obtaining an active lifestyle and would raise the probability of future food addictions.
In conclusion, obeying a deleterious diet such as pre-prepared meals has a detrimental effect on our body system. Therefore, families should amend their food choices. Companies ,as well, must not delude youngsters by advertising high-calorie products.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 244.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.77868852459 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31368246244 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.684426229508 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0178086223 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.461538462 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7692307692 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0313872668726 0.244688304435 13% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0121929798181 0.084324248473 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0193043421519 0.0667982634062 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0195189421655 0.151304729494 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120408117119 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.24 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.48 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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