Poor nutrition and obesity is a problem in many developed countries and some people believe that a tax on fast food would reduce the problem. Do you agree?
With the mass development of life conditions and living standard, people in many wealthy countries are increasingly suffering from poor nutrition and obesity which demand for a practical solution. While many claim that tax enhancement would mitigate the problems, I’m strongly against this idea. In these following paragraphs, I will give clear evidence and support my statements.
To begin with, the rising tax does not only ease this situation but it also raises the indignation of the customers when their favors are being imposed with the new tax. Because of the fact that junk food has been the dominant goods worldwide, any authorities who intend to impose new taxes would bring counterproductive effects such as detest campaigns or some strong criticism,... Apparently, people are continuing to purchase fast food given the fact that they are all aware of its consequences in the long run. Therefore, this alarming phenomenon cannot be tackled in just a matter of days or weeks.
The first and foremost solution is to try to alter people’s self consciousness about the harmful effects of fast food which requires the joint hand of both government, citizens and even some food organizations,.. Clearly, the propaganda campaign via social networks, newspapers, TV programs,.. will help upgrade the belief of people on fast food and gradually rule out the dominance of junk food. Another approach to put into consideration is to cooperate with the fast food production to try new healthy products instead of burgers or chickens,.. Hence, this process will last yearly so if the locals offer enough efforts they will definitely alter this reality.
To conclude, although imposing a new tax is a great option to some extent but it would make no sense if the customers did not change their habits. From my own perspective, I strongly detest this approach and offer some proper solutions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, hence, if, so, therefore, while, even so, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18241042345 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87553711964 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648208469055 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4580675536 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.642857143 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228356292791 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688929361581 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580246090615 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131218783421 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406753728654 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.