At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
In this day and age, the number of young adults in some countries are relatively higher than the number of older people. In my opinion, I do believe that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks, since they may boost the economy.
On the one hand, the main disadvantages of a large number of young adults in some countries is the high rate of unemployment. As the old have their own careers, they have a stable job or even run their own businesses. Meanwhile, younger people, especially who have just graduated, are still looking for a job. If there are many people applying for the same position, their chance of working for that position is very low. For instance, thousands of student who are going to graduate from the university of pedagogy are going to be unemployed, since many pupils want to be a teacher while there are not enough schools for them.
On the other hand, young adults play an important role in economic growth. Younger people are more creative and active than older people. They are willing to offer changes or innovations to the economy. Moreover, young adults have a better health than the old, which may help them to work for a long time. For example, according to a survey, most of the staffs in a entertaining company are from 20 to 30 years old. However, the young people can also start up business by themselves.
In conclusion, although the large number of young adults leads to the high rate of unemployment, the advantages do outweigh the disadvantages, based on the reasons I have mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 44, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...the one hand, the main disadvantages of a large number of young adults in some countries is the h...
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Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ding to a survey, most of the staffs in a entertaining company are from 20 to 30 ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1265.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73782771536 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64448651455 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561797752809 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9073118558 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3571428571 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269856480089 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928852620524 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117995455691 0.0667982634062 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192367732172 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0937447646465 0.056905535591 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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