Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Nowadays, restricting the market to sell harmful-effect product which is scientifically dangerous for human body has to be imposed. Partially, I consent to the same point of view which I will elaborate in the following paragraph.
On the one hand, to regulate harmful product to be sold by shop seems to me that it might decrease the national revenue, where such product probably contributes high proportion of tax. To illustrate, cigarette; bringing numerous harm effect for human body profoundly contributes high proportion towards tax revenue of Indonesia. Furthermore, the more products will be restricted, the more increase the product price will be. This occurs since such product would use high quality substance affecting to the cost production. Subsequently, people could not afford their necessity.
On the flip side, in my point of view, if government do not impose the regulation, people would consume such product time after time without consideration towards the harm effects, which plenty of disease would occurs. Subsequently It could decrease the people’s life expectancy. In addition, this could force people to move forwards on the healthy life way as they do not have any choice to get such product. In terms of their body, they would be lessened a particular disease resulted by harmful product.
To sum up, it seems to me that unimposing such regulation to restrict dangerous products might bring several effects including decreasing number of disease probability and forcing people to have healthy life. This is as long as the products is affordable for the society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'occur'
Suggestion: occur
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Subsequently,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, as to, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1344.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31225296443 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92804019148 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581027667984 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2555169648 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.384615385 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4615384615 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23076923077 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139766070304 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555020222019 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408630356353 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091117303367 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020676834286 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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