Some people think that children should aim to be the best at what they are doing while others believe it is not necessary for them.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Since small, children have been reminded to set their heart in everything they do. However, some people contend that it is pivotal for them to aspire for the first place. From my point of view, although this mindset can offer several benefits, I am of the opinion that children should not always covet for their optimal performance in everything.
On the one hand, it is irrefutable that the expectation for the first place can drive children to excel and give them a leg up in their future life. Undoubtedly, if children are aware of their needs to be the best, they are given impetus to work harder and perform better. As a result, they can be a more resilient, perseverent and determined individual who can reap fruitful outcomes from their efforts. Moreover, this mindset can also stand them in good stead in the workplace as children would grow into competent and determined employees through the process of honing their skills for the best.
On the other hand, there are glaring reasons why always being the best is not a judicial goal for children. The first thing to notice is that it would put strains on children as they are hunted by having to put more effort. If that stress prolongs, it will encroach on their daily lives and be detrimental for their mental health. Furthermore, overcompetitiveness can hinder children’s opportunities to make friends and partake in playful activities. Take myself as an example, since I was so obsessed with ranking first in my primary class, I was complacent and selfish, hence other peers ignored and alienated me. Consequently, children like me, who have this insatiable desire for the best, may experience an undelightful childhood of always competing and working.
In conclusion, although children can, to some extent, merit from the aim to be the best, I am convinced that it should not be mandatorily instilled in children's minds as this mindset will afflict their mental health as well as jeopardise their childhood.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97891566265 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78424552668 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563253012048 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3720931787 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.071428571 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6428571429 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250738810971 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943686571614 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481363799432 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168077191361 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304128792246 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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