Some people think that schools should reward the students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements.
Discus both views and give your opinion.
Some people opine that schools should give some awards to students who perform great in their academic score. Whereas, others believe that is more essential to give reward the students who show the improvements in their score. I personally support the letter view. I will discuss both view in the essay and give my opinion.
Regarding to those who argue that schools should give awards to students who did best in their academic subjects. They believe that by giving award to this kind of students schools praise their hard work and they get more motivated and perform more in their academic subjects. By getting award not only the students who get this reward but also the pupils who did not perform well in their subjects they do more hard work for achieve that reward.
As for those who believe that schools should give rewards to those who show the rally in their performance. It is crucial that students who did not get high score but show the increment as compare to their previous score than they should rewarded by some award. By doing this, they get influenced to do more hard work to get high score and also satisfied with their work. Due to reward, all the students do more hard work to show improvements in their grades. This kind of activity can make all pupils motivated to their academic and sports activity.
In conclusion, although schools should give rewards to only students who perform high, they should give honour to the student who show the improvements.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... perform great in their academic score. Whereas others believe that is more essential t...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...s. They believe that by giving award to these kind of students schools praise their hard w...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ore hard work for achieve that reward. As for those who believe that schools sh...
^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... hard work for achieve that reward. As for those who believe that schools shou...
^^
Line 5, column 461, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...k to show improvements in their grades. These kind of activity can make all pupils motivat...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 154, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the student who show the improvements.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, regarding, so, well, whereas, as for, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1233.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79766536965 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27064723084 2.80592935109 81% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 176.041082164 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412451361868 0.561755894193 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 360.9 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0154126327 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8461538462 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460257952316 0.244688304435 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216576467766 0.084324248473 257% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131473161112 0.0667982634062 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.368279963801 0.151304729494 243% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0883568643092 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... perform great in their academic score. Whereas others believe that is more essential t...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...s. They believe that by giving award to these kind of students schools praise their hard w...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ore hard work for achieve that reward. As for those who believe that schools sh...
^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... hard work for achieve that reward. As for those who believe that schools shou...
^^
Line 5, column 461, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...k to show improvements in their grades. These kind of activity can make all pupils motivat...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 154, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the student who show the improvements.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, regarding, so, well, whereas, as for, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1233.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79766536965 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27064723084 2.80592935109 81% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 176.041082164 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412451361868 0.561755894193 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 360.9 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0154126327 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8461538462 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460257952316 0.244688304435 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216576467766 0.084324248473 257% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131473161112 0.0667982634062 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.368279963801 0.151304729494 243% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0883568643092 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.