Some people think young people are not suitable for important positions in the government, while other people think it is a good idea for young people to take on these positions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Recently, whether young generation is eligible for crucial positions in the government has become a fiercely controversial issue. Some people assert that young workers have the right to obtain high positions, such as ministers and presidents, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that young workers deserve to be in charge of important positions, Perhaps an obvious reason is that they are more likely to think flexibly since they are not conservative, compared to old generation. In addition, hiring young people in crucial positions makes it possible for them to become more motivated. To exemplify, one recent article released by the Seoul Times illustrates that Kihun Lee, who was 35 years old in 2008, was promoted to a vice president in the financial department of Seoul city hall and this phenomenon exerted a positive influence on a multitude of young people in South Korea.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that young workers are entitled to obtain high positions. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that some specific fields in the government, such as militaries and police offices should hire elderly people as people engaged in these fields have to follow gruelling rules. Thus, elderly workers’ experience take priority over flexibility. Furthermore, elderly people have a number of lessons resulted from their failure and these are useful when people are faced with unpredictable situations. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
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... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24683544304 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84104611401 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604430379747 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.0310426795 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.428571429 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384653325047 0.244688304435 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103619296721 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730049161851 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191177351628 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0941485202998 0.056905535591 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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