spend more time on family or entertaining outside
It is true that family and entertainment play indispensable role in the real life of young people. While I and some people believe that the young should spend most of their leisure time on attending many activities with all family members, others disagree with this statement.
On the one hand, there are many convincing reasons to explain about why I would agree that the young people should pay attention on their families at home. One of these reasons is because they usually use their time of approximately 8 hours per day for studying, working and developing purpose. Joining many shared activities and creating more and more unforgettable memories with all members in family at home offers a golden opportunity to strengthen their bonds and understand each other deeply. Moreover, if the young people spend so much their spare time on participating recreational activities outside, their study or relationships within their family will be weaken due to their negligence significantly. Gradually, their performance and result are likely to be worse and worse because of the lack of contact between them and their families.
On the other hand, some people would like to argue against above opinion since outside entertainment can bring many undeniable benefits to the young’s life. Firstly, the youth is the most beautiful period of people and they should not just go to school and come back home with their parents. Attending various types of creative and physical activities outside with friends would contribute to network development, decline of stress and enhance of their health considerably. This could make their youth more meaningful and worthier to live their life. In addition, spending more of the young people’s free time on activities of entertainment can help them to get a great chance to develop more crucial and important soft skills such as: communication, problem solving, creativity and imagination. These ones play an really essential part on the road of reaching the high of success in their career path in the future.
In conclusion, while there are a number of perfect reasons responsible for why the young people should appreciate every moment with family by spending more free time with them, some people believe in the more importance of attending entertainment activities outside
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 806, Rule ID: THESE_ONES[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'These' instead.
Suggestion: These
...em solving, creativity and imagination. These ones play an really essential part on the ro...
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Line 3, column 822, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...tivity and imagination. These ones play an really essential part on the road of re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, really, so, then, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25806451613 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85076050771 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540322580645 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.2937152348 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.714285714 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5714285714 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29231253012 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104561912153 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0965402078165 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226285640053 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791507413901 0.056905535591 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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