Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The high sales of a certain product are claimed to be a result of a good advertisement and not because of the demand of the consumers. In my opinion, even without product advertisement people would still buy based on their immediate needs.
Undoubtedly, there are benefits of advertisement to certain companies and buyers. It makes the product known to the public and allows consumers to have choices. However, advertisement is not a major factor in having high sales. This is for the reason that consumers buy products even without advertisements. For example, the company that produces rice, a staple Filipino food, has no single advertisement, yet they have the highest sales in the food market. Thus, we could say that people buy products based on what they need, and not on what the media or other people tell them.
Moreover, people nowadays are intelligent consumers. They are knowledgeable about how advertisement could be sometimes manipulative and only shows the positive side of the product. For instance, vegetable oils containing omega-3 would only tell about the benefits of omega-3 and exclude the negative effects that other ingredients have on one's health. So despite advertising strategies, products would not have increased sales because buyers are more knowledgeable and base their purchases on what they think is essential.
To conclude, advertising may encourage individuals to buy certain items but it is not the main reason why products are popular in the market. I believe that if an item is essential, consumers would still buy them even without a single advertisement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25291828794 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98822551709 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533073929961 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6895414114 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4285714286 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156281374875 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587428825213 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407165799537 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100406923932 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305741509609 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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