When new towns are planned, it is more important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Currently, there have been an increasing number of people who take an interest in exercise. Therefore, it is believed that the government should invest in parks or sports facilities rather than shopping malls for national fitness, in order to spend their spare time. Although the latter can provide a wide variety of goods desired by consumer, the former is necessary and beneficial more healthily and actively to residents in new towns.
People who are against this proposal said that a shopping center, a large building with a concentration of shops and restaurants, can offer people shopping a comfortable space with air condition to kill time. However, not only the shopping centers can provide this occasion, but also the indoor stadium can do it. and if you come here on the weekend, there are a lot of people, which make you feel suffocated. In addition, for consumers with poor self-control, such construction plans easily make them addicted to shopping and then fall into consumerism. What is more, it is maybe harmful for people to take in too much oil and salt from sumptuous feasts in restaurants.
Moreover, I believe investment in public parks or sports facilities is generally beneficial and necessary. First of all, the government in new town usually is too out of budget to pay for the huge construction costs of the mall. By contrast, public parks or sports facilities are less expensive to install. In fact, for many people, they would rather free of charge than payment. Through this plan, urban residents can have the opportunity to enjoy the same high-quality and comfortable basic public services for free. The other reason why chose this project is that Increasing the number of parks and sports facilities is more conducive to creating a green, harmonious and beautiful living environment. Unlike the noisy commercial environment in shopping malls, which are full of the crowd, construction for parks and ports facilities can give people approach to be in touch with nature. As William Wordsworth's poem tells us, when all at once I saw a crowd, a host, of golden daffodils; Beside the lake, beneath the trees, fluttering and dancing in the breeze. What a poetic scene! And then imagine that after you do some moderate exercise such as jogging, cycling and playing badminton, the felling of sweating can make you feel relaxed more than shopping, which takes you away from the busy work and study, especially do outdoor sport while breathing the fresh air and enjoying beautiful scenery. The choose also is beneficial to construction of forest city and Implementation of national fitness program.
In conclusion, I am in favor of investing in public parks or sports facilities, who view from either the residents or the government standpoint.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is usually
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...portunity to enjoy the same high-quality and comfortable basic public services fo...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...esh air and enjoying beautiful scenery. The choose also is beneficial to construction of f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2317.0 1615.20841683 143% => OK
No of words: 456.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08114035088 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80327241253 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 176.041082164 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55701754386 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6078133531 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.947368421 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.68421052632 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38614932422 0.244688304435 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986194775667 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547317176112 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202077318522 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802983286255 0.056905535591 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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