Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.
Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In more common these days, as the tremendous progress of technology, more and more electronic devices have been transformed including the smartphone. It is said that children should not be allowed to use smartphone as it is easier to distract them from study. However, as far as the quality of cooperation, a approach of release stress and the tools of study are concerned, I strongly hold that we should allow children using smartphone appropriately as it has several benefit for them.
One major benefit is that it can make children form the quality of cooperation, knowing helping each other when working in a grope of people. There are games easily downloaded in smartphones which allow players to work as a team to beat another one and most of them are quite popular with children. They can hardly win a game unless the teammates help each other and fighting together to another team. What if children did not pick up the phone and play the games? I guess they tend to be a “superhero” in a team instead of cooperate each other.
Another issue is that proper use of smart phone could reduce the pressure of children. Nowadays, there are large amounts of assignments and examinations in school for them to be done, they need something to relax and recreation so that they would have more motivation and energy for the study of next day. Playing smartphone could bring them happiness and make them forget annoying things temporarily such as the fail of exam. Therefore, using smartphones in controlled time could reduce the pressure of children in some extant, and we should encourage them to do that.
Admittedly, using smartphone would make children be absorbed in the world of internet, videos and games and they will find study is not as attractive as it, so they spend less time on classes and hardly do their assignments. However, I believe it is not the origin sin of smartphone. Someone who have bad self-control and do not keen on study would be distracted by a lot of things besides smartphones. By contrast, for those who desire to gain more knowledge, smartphone is a perfect tool for them. Taking my friend Alan an example who is definitely a study nerd. He would surf the internet as soon as he meets the problem in his homework. By doing this, he won the scholarships at this seminar for the first time.
To conclude, smartphones do harm the children in some ways, but overall, I still believe that the advantages play a bigger role than the drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
..., as far as the quality of cooperation, a approach of release stress and the tool...
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Line 1, column 462, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun benefit seems to be countable; consider using: 'several benefits'.
Suggestion: several benefits
...sing smartphone appropriately as it has several benefit for them. One major benefit is that it...
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Line 5, column 148, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... play a bigger role than the drawbacks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, i guess, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 430.0 315.596192385 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76976744186 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73961878499 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523255813953 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6134430163 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.55 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155667796125 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471708883405 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051124810486 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0904010064756 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358152844598 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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