Young people who commit serious crimes, such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are arguments about whether juveniles should be confronted with consequences for committing severe crimes like robbery or assault in an equal way as adults. I believe, they ought to take responsibility for their acts, yet differently, and I will explain why.
Young people with a lack of self-awareness, under the influence of peer pressure, or the effect of parents’ divorce are more likely to engage in risky behaviour. Therefore, the focus of the minor justice system should be to rehabilitate young offenders. So that she or he can be a functioning and law-abiding adult. For example, instead of sending them to a prison where they will be surrounded by dangerous criminals, the judge may allow them to remain in a reformatory school where they can continue their academic studies while also receiving counselling and treatment. These solutions will assist them in identifying the proper actions to take and avoiding those who or situation that is harmful to their future. Besides, if these juveniles are treated very seriously by the court, they may carry serious and long-lasting consequences like mental ill-health or disorder behaviour. The minors are future generations; thus, we should educate them and give them opportunities to contribute and to be responsible members of society.
Admittedly, criminals of all ages should be held accountable for their actions, regardless of their age or maturity. However, it is unfair and merciless to send them to the same court, as they are not grown enough for such severe penalties.
In conclusion, I don't agree with the view that adolescent delinquency should take the same sentence as adult delinquency. The reason is that they do not yet have full self-control and the harsh penalty may have adverse outcomes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1498.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23776223776 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00803364657 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608391608392 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.989708136 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.230769231 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188974309885 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646368425494 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467550303155 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107737055434 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172555527614 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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