Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Recently, as technology continues to develop in an unprecedented pace, more advanced versions of electronics has been introduced, such as ultra-thin televisions and remote charging of phones. In fact, watching televisions and movies has been very common nowadays, and it can have a lot of effects on young people. I am absolutely against the idea that movies and TV shows can influence youngsters in a positive way such that they help them develop correct conduct. In the following paragraphs, I will examine the issue surrounding my opinion.
First of all, as movie companies and TV shows become more prevalent lately, owners of the firms that make shows and films attempt their best to incorporate a variety of techniques and attractive contents to catch the attention of the audience, and this often include violence, scenes, and crime actions. Furthermore, young individuals who are exposed to these shows would imitate the behaviors easily; this would make society more hazardous and increase crime rate. This would also make people develop vigilance when going outdoors. Take myself as an example: after attending college and in the era of COVID-19, I become more aware of the greater potential of danger in society; this makes me more careful about all people around me, and I even purchased a 400-dollar bullet-proof backpack just in case of any onward attacks from seemingly ordinary pedestrians.
Secondly, simply sitting in front of a television or watching movies in a movie theater would decrease people's mobility. The reason is that people would become less motivated to engage in sports or other types of physical exercise. In fact, this would increase the risk of developing obesity; this can contribute to higher likelihood for chronic diseases such as high blood pressure and heart disease due to the reduced level of movement and physical activity. Young people should be active in society to stay wholesome and active. Ergo, watching TV or films would harm them in ways that should be paid more attention to. For example, I used to slack in front of televisions back in elementary school. After receiving the information that my cousin developed high blood pressure due to the lack of exercise and long-term inactivity simply because of television addiction, I decided to refrain from watching TVs. I began joining my school clubs such as basketball club and volleyball club; this not only allowed my to become healthier, but it also helped me develop friendships and camaraderie with different types of students.
Finally, watching TV shows and movies would be deleterious to the eyes, People watching too much TVs or films have increased issues with vision. Furthermore, young people are in the age of hardwork and on the way to become mature, so they should take extra good care of their eyes. They still have decades ahead of them; therefore, they should not develop serious myopia too early on. Terrible eye vision would also prevent them from stay focused during study because they have to adjust the distance between the eyes and the material they are studying. This is best exemplified by my personal experience. As a high schooler, I abstain from watching TV and movies, I simply listened to music and podcast, which help me improve my listening skills significantly. By not spending time in front of TV or computers screens too much, my eye vision still allows me to always concentrate on my studies. I am very prideful of my particularly great eyesight because a lot of people of my age could have already lost their good vision.
To recapitulate, televisions and movies should be banned exclusively among young people due to its overwelmingly detrimental on them in various aspects. This includes the imitation of violence and sex scenes, develpment of obsesity, and bad vision.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 398, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...s and TV shows can influence youngsters in a positive way such that they help them develop correc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for example, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3189.0 1977.66487455 161% => OK
No of words: 626.0 407.700716846 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09424920128 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00199880112 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75832896349 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 323.0 212.727598566 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515974440895 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 999.0 618.680645161 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.1039000278 48.9658058833 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.56 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.04 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152457293162 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480704875073 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040852149777 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930735097788 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339096412682 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 169.0 86.8835125448 195% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 398, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...s and TV shows can influence youngsters in a positive way such that they help them develop correc...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for example, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3189.0 1977.66487455 161% => OK
No of words: 626.0 407.700716846 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09424920128 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00199880112 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75832896349 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 323.0 212.727598566 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515974440895 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 999.0 618.680645161 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.1039000278 48.9658058833 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.56 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.04 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152457293162 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480704875073 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040852149777 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930735097788 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339096412682 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 169.0 86.8835125448 195% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.