Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In recent years, the whole world has been changing astronomically at the speed of light with the advent of novel ideas and state-of-the-art technologies. Hence, it is an undeniable fact that our life has gone vividly through extensive alternations since television and movies evolved into being. Ergo, when it comes to my stance, by weighing up the pros and cons, I personally hold the idea that the young generation has become considerably under the influence of these programs. At first glance, we observe so many negative effects which seem to directly threaten the future of them but we should not neglect the glass as half-full that I will elaborate on the following by presenting three principal rationales.
First and foremost, the prime reason why I am of such a belief is that movies and television have played a significant part in shaping children's mentalities which appear in different forms such as the way of eating, dressing, and general attitudes. It does not require to ascertain this fact that children imitate actors' and actresses' behaviors unconsciously. Apart from the fact that a few of them are involved in sex and drugs scandal but fortunately, nowadays most of them are competent and diligent ones who try to raise money for charities and support humanitarian assistance. As a result of that, children have run successful campaigns to help poverty-stricken people which is implied that famous persons have positive effects.
On the other hand, another paramount fact that must be cataloged here is that the widespread of this mass media throughout the world depict the popularity of them has increased enormously. Subsequently, movies and television cover many broad aspects of general entertainment. What I mean is that these programs have a major role in getting tiredness and boredom away from teenagers because they are affordable, enjoyable, and domestic. Thus, family members can have a fun time together without spending so much money.
In conclusion, according to the aforementioned reasons, I partially do not concur with the initial statement and as some experts say that these media are a double-edged sword, I believe that we should adapt themselves to new environments and gain maximum benefit from advanced technologies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ascertaining'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: ascertaining
... general attitudes. It does not require to ascertain this fact that children imitate actors ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, so, thus, apart from, i mean, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26170798898 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03687491728 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6391184573 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.5405629583 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.923076923 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9230769231 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152742654024 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418929460719 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314085231671 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745367861373 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023411022563 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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