Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, different laws, policies, and rules in different countries or regions around the world serve as a power to prevent wrongful acts from bringing chaos to society. I am absolutely against that these rules are to be loosened or make less strict for young people. Instead, they are really playing a wonderful role in helping societies to become more peaceful. The following paragraphs will examine the reasons behind my thoughts.
First of all, the rules are not too strict for young individuals to follow because we can see the crime rates are skyrocketing in certain countries worldwide; for example, the United States. In my opinion, the rules should be even more intimidating to allow societies regain their previous peace and help people feel a sense of security. Stricter rules or policies can definitely reduce crime rates. For instance, in the COVID era, mask mandate is becoming less effective due to people's unwillingness to cooperate and their egocentric thoughts. However, if the government set a rule that incarcerate those who refuse to wear masks when outdoors and gives them a life sentence, the number of people who do not follow the rules would significantly decrease.
Second of all, all citizens, including youngsters, within a country have the responsibility to show obedience to the rules and policies. They should not complain about that the rules are too unhumane or criticize the government. If they have different thoughts, they should write letters to the governmental agencies to opine. For example, as a college freshman, I once questioned the seemingly weird rule by sending an email to the governmental organization. I got a response two days later with explicit reason mentioning why the government made this rule and the reason behind its purpose. I willingly accepted the opinion as very appropriate and thanked the agent.
Third, I believe the rule-makers have their reasons to set certain rules or policies; therefore, these rules are not too stringent for young folks. In fact, young people should be forced to follow them because they are not yet mature enough. They are all still in the process of learning and gaining experience. If there are no such rules, they will never now where they have done wrong and where they need to make adjustments. The reason is that when they engage in incorrect conduct, they will receive penalties , which serve as a reminder for them to refrain from wrongdoings. To summarize, young people should accept all the strict rules for three reasons. First, there are still crimes out there, and the crime rate is surging, so the rules should be even stricter. Second, all citizens, including youngsters, have the responsibility to obey the rules made by the country's government. Third, strict rules can serve as a deterrent to prevent young individuals to engage in certain harmful or incorrect behaviors.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 514, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, really, second, so, still, therefore, third, for example, for instance, in fact, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2411.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11889596603 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76199607942 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515923566879 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 747.9 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.02555336 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.458333333 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202811968234 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617800869667 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048800958848 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134565234987 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350152667398 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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