Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of a doubt, achieving success in this hectic world of today indeed turned into a challenge, mostly due to some reason, sanctions, inflation, political conflicts, to name but a few. Taking risks and contributing to new ideas can play a pivotal role to have a successful life. An unanswered question in this area is whether taking risks and enjoying new ideas will lead to success or not. Despite the arguments asserting that taking a risk and trying a new thing in this unstable economy is considered as a suicide, I believe otherwise, maintaining that explore new opportunities and deal with new ideas could be a life-changing decision that will lead to victory. There are several reasons which bear in mind, two of which will be elucidated in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, the crux of the matter lies in the fact that new job opportunities and success in the business have to do with taking a risk and being eager for new things. By Exploring a new environment and gaining new experiences, people will be capable to enlarge their circle of connection and to meet new people with different ideas. Consequently, one can be provided by new opportunities that are possible due to taking risks and meeting new people and ideas. As an example, I had a friend who was working in a corporation for a low-paid job. Afterward, he met an advertisement about the stock investment workshop at the university. Therefore, He took a risk and quit his job in order to try a new carrier, and eventually, he achieved great success. Had not he taken a risk in his first years of works, he would not have saved an ample amount of money. Grounded to this example, taking risks wisely and trying new things not only will not lead to failure but can provide a shining future for people, as well.
The second worthwhile momentous point which deserves some words is that learning new things, even through failure can be the fruitful result of trying new ideas. Psychology speaking, there is a safe zone inside everybody's mind which does not permit them to explore a new world. Although this a hereditary defensive process in dangerous situations, perceiving new facet of life and gaining valuable experiences could be done via crossing the safe zone's line. Additionally, even if this new decision for the life does not lead to success, the failure undoubtedly could be considered a stepping stone for future victories; as the Persian proverb states that "the first stage of victory is failure".
To draw the conclusion grounded on the above statements, I vehemently believe that gaining new experiences and find new opportunities are the results of exiting the safe zone and taking risks. Success is a global goal for humans throughout history which it's fundamental prerequisites are taking risks and trying hard.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92901878914 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86362189686 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505219206681 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.215619446 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.263157895 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2105263158 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36842105263 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206789130464 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719447641947 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525080005814 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128646087031 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549196770253 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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