Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Throughout the whole history, a plethora of people especially young people are perennially attracted to famous people, such as entertainers and athletes and ,nowadays, fashion models are who people follow them. There are other people radically disagree that they should not pay more attention to them. In my viewpoint, youths are more eager to attract to them. The lines below will shed more light on my viewpoint.
the first and most exquisite point which coming to the mind to substantiate my standpoint is increasing the commercials and attentions that every brands put on celebrities. In this modern society, that commercials and commerce play a important rule in media such as television and social medias, sometimes on billboards among the city lives , people spontaneously are attracted to them. So they would be eager to know more about them. For instance, some fashion models are in TV programs and we can see their advertisements for famous companies this would cause curious young people follow them and get to know them more. adults know that this commercials are ephemeral.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that young people , who are in a period that they are becoming mature, they want to be famous as celebrities,so they converging their minds on them to be like them. Celebrities' behaviors and characteristics are more important for them. Take Cristiano Ronaldo as an example, he is a professional football player and he awarded times for his best plays. He, also doing some activity in order to support poor children, these humanities makes him a lovely character among children, not only children but also adult people love them too. Nonetheless, this behaviors impress children.
To sum up, celebrities are more attractive nowadays and young children follow them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, nonetheless, so, for instance, such as, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21305841924 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83357445553 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570446735395 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9816809594 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.133333333 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202167140315 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703447915562 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580253796867 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130936003765 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551726505329 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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