Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree with the following statement. During our life we pass through different stages of upbringing, maturing on the way to become elders. In all the stages from the youngest period we are under the influence of different people in our lives. those are parents, teachers, professors, coaches, neighbours even our best friends. In modern times there are different mediums through which we can come in contact and under influence of different famous people around us. Entertainers, athletes and others are much closer and have more authority over younger and teens than elders, and there are a few reasons why.
First young people are main users of social networks as facebook, instagram, youtube where they can hear and watch their favorite famous persons. In those videos, pictures, podcasts etc they can hear and see behaviour and opinions of the celebrities. influencers are new kind of people on the internet and their main audience are kids, teens and young people. older people are also users of the internet but they are not main group on the social media.
Second, in their teens, young people are not still completely formed personalities and they are unconsciously in a search for someone who will be their role model, someone who they will be following in they behaviour, habits, way of clothing. Celebrities through TV, internet, magazines and other media are those authority young people are looking for. If we look and see older people as formed personalities we can come to conclusion that they are not under the influence as younger.
Third reason that young people are more under the influence of the opinion of the famous people is that younger people are living faster way of life where information runs faster, they meet each other in school, sports, cafes, clubs, parties, music concerts and other gatherings where they can see celebrities and other people they find important in society and try to imitate. older people live different way of life and are not under impact of all media as younger.
famous people and celebrities can be important factor in upbringing of young people but we have to be very cautious.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, still, third, as for, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00840336134 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53202076562 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473389355742 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.5196321744 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.75 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3125 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3125 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227738846711 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862426680996 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657692435473 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130007788028 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300611440504 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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