The government wants to make investment to improve education Which one of the following investments do you think is the best
With the pandemic looming over the world since the end of 2019, it vitally important to invest in healthcare more than ever before to provide a safe surrounding for citizens so that they can return to their businesses as soon as possible. Therefore, even if financing land exploration or education has its merits, it is better to consider healthcare as a top priority under this circumstance, which will be elaborated in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, healthcare has been taken lightly before pandemic and we paid a heavy price for that. Millions of people get infected, plenty of whom have severe syndrome. Unfortunately this number is still going up. Were it not for the shortage of investment in healthcare, many countries would have sufficiently prepared to fight against COVI-19. Particularly, if a healthcare fund is applied to meet the demand of hospital beds, staff, or vaccines to name a few, then it will not only improve the efficiency of managing health services, but also will increase the number of patients being treated in time.
On the other hand, most governments get accustomed to spending money on where they can maximize return and minimize cost. Consequently, Investing in land exploration appears to be an ideal tactic to earn profits in a short term, whereas financing healthcare which bring little gain receives little attention. However, this approach is not sustainable under pandemic since numerous places go into lockdown, along with the shutdown of hotels, shopping malls, or businesses relying on travelers’ consumption. To make our society prosperous again, this time we should consider to invest in healthcare instead to control the spread of pandemic and prevent similar events from happening in the future.
Meanwhile, as long as the pandemic is still rampant, almost all schools have to set up new policies to avoid any possible outbreak of virus. In this case, funding healthcare can absolutely contribute to increase the safety of campus for students, teachers and faculty members. For example, the government can spend money on healthcare infrastructure that can offer enough masks for them to wear regularly to reduce the threat from COVI-19.
To sum up, only when the investment of healthcare is prioritized, can the afraid of the unprecedented future of our society be reduced under the hazard of pandemic.
- TOEFL Writing practice test 9 3
- TOEFL Writing practice test 9 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider investing'.
Suggestion: consider investing
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, whereas, while, for example, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24934383202 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89693399342 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608923884514 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.1802607743 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.333333333 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117170976634 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0354629357146 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034872641997 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0665037495019 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338451976643 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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