It is more important to keep your old friends than to make new friends
Throughout the history, human beings have been looking for ways to socialize with each other and create new chains of communication. Finding friends and keeping them are the best ways of socializing. Some people believe it is crucial to keep old friends instead of making new friends, while some others have an opposite opinion. From my vantage point, it is important for us to elevate our friend's circle and making new friends rather than keeping old friends.
First, it is significant to be mentioned that, making new friends gives us an opportunity to socialize with more people with different backgrounds and diverse cultures. By making friends we can enhance our social skills and get familiar with a wide range of cultures. For instance, when I was a high school student my friends was confined to just two people who I know from primary school. I knew everything about their family, their habits, their culture. So Most of the time we do not have new topics for discuss. Besides, there were no chance for us to know another people and learn about another cultures. But, after high school I start making new friends and spend my time with them, It was an appropriate opportunity for me to elevate my social cycle and learn many things.
Another reason which deserves some attention here is that, making new friends help us broaden our perspective in order to be a more creative person in solving problems. People can get help from their friend and use others opinion and others experience in predicaments. Thus, having more friends with more opinion would be more beneficial. The results of an experiment conducted in my country underscore the fact that, individuals with more friends come up with novel notions. And they solve problems efficient.
last but not least, making new friends does not mean loosing the old ones. We can manage our old friends and make new friends, too. Since, making new friends has more benefits, we should pay more attention to it and spend our time and energy to making new friends rather than keeping old friends. For example, I allocate one day of month to my old friends and spend time with them, but I focus on making new friends instead of spending my entire energy to keep my old friends.
From what has been discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that, making new friends is more important to keep old friends. New friends not only help us improve our social skill, but also broaden our perspective. As a matter of fact there are some other reasons and examples that can be evoked to support my opinion, but let's just suffice to this.
- TOEFL T P O 46 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Last
...s. And they solve problems efficient. last but not least, making new friends does ...
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Line 7, column 54, Rule ID: LOOSING_EFFORTRECORDSEASON[1]
Message: Did you mean 'losing the'?
Suggestion: losing the
...least, making new friends does not mean loosing the old ones. We can manage our old friends...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, look, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79064587973 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43442986704 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465478841871 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8661111944 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5217391304 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5217391304 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34782608696 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50176749525 0.236089414692 213% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178489152361 0.076458572812 233% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148327226539 0.0737576698707 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.340462784275 0.150856017488 226% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125773164067 0.0645574589148 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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