People who develop many different skills are more successful
Nowadays, more and more people are debating if developing various skills can be more helpful for career. Though there are many people who are special in one area are difinitely successful, I strongly believe that it is more likely to success when you know different kinds of skills. I hold this opinion for two reasons, and I will demonstrates my idea in the subsequent passage.
First and foremost, solving a single problem always require different sorts of knowledge and skills. If you only fucus on one segment, it is unlikely to handle the real problem in life or work. My own experience is a compelling example to illustrate the importance of developing many different skills. When I was in high school, my class was preparing to have a talent show in our school annual celebration and I was in charge of it. To bigin with, I felt it is esay to finish because I only need to arrange some classmates to dance and sing. However, I realized it needs more soon, for a talent show also needs the accompanied music, setting and etc. Moreover, I have to learn how to edit music for the show and acquire basic setting knowledge for the show. This experience told me that I have to know different knowledge to accompilish a single success.
In addition, when you can apply a number of skills together, you can create something new. That is how creativity works, even though you will not feel it at the beginning. It just as what Steven Jobs said, you can not connect the dots looking forward, you can only connect them looking backward. For instance, my cousin was major in computer science in university. He gradually feel it is not his passion to focus on this area, therefore he took part in a finiance graduate program, which is he really enjoy. After he graduated, he went to an investment bank, and there was so many paper works to do. So, he made a software to reduce the human's work and increase working productivity. He was prized and promoted by company because of the software. If he had not have both skills of finance and computer science, he would not have created the effective software.
In conclusion, I sincerely hold the view that developing a number of different skills is more possible to success. This is because dealing with a problem needs many kinds of skills, and because people can be more creative when they have more skills and information.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: demonstrate
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Suggestion: many
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
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Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'feels'.
Suggestion: feels
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
... because of the software. If he had not have both skills of finance and computer sci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, moreover, really, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68660287081 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62063077113 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511961722488 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.0256151633 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.0454545455 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295719358081 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819318314788 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120075455439 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249325565768 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.174767965993 0.0645574589148 271% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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