Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sc

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Opinions diverge on whether kids should spend free time on learning while they cannot involve with their parents. Although some fervently advocate this sentiment, I am at loggerheads owing to some rational reasons.
Admittedly, participating in sports can be a good tool for children to gain good health. This can be explained by the fact that training in football, badminton or basketball will boost kids’ endurance because they have to be active mostly when playing. Besides that, kids easily develop their height during the time they engage in sports. While playing basketball or swimming, jumping and stretching repeatedly enhance young people’s heigh. Moreover, kids are supposed to avoid myriads of illnesses such as obesity or scoliosis which are two common diseases that throngs of young people are facing these days. While the former affects adversely their mental and physical health, the latter, worse still, affects kids’ movement.
Further and even more prominently, playing games will be an effective method for kids to release stress after arduous schooling. This thesis could not be correct for many people because parents believe that children cannot control their behavior well; actually, kids can gain plenty of skills needed through games. For example, students mostly have bad typing skills due to a lack of time in using computers; hence, being in touch with computers from a young age can be a great foundation to practice their typing skills which is useful to use in the future. Moreover, kids manage a long hours at school so they need time to relax at home which doing school works is not suitable. This implies that, playing games will be a great time to kids to let their eyes relax.
All things considered, kids should relax dont need a fuck to study.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 589, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'hour'?
Suggestion: hour
...he future. Moreover, kids manage a long hours at school so they need time to relax at...
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Line 5, column 42, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ll things considered, kids should relax dont need a fuck to study.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, hence, moreover, so, still, well, while, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 293.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11945392491 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42464025367 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62457337884 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3754091241 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.142857143 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9285714286 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217937187242 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695143798192 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463958271916 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114216339564 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685758537015 0.0645574589148 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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