Your friend is going to reduce the living expenses. Which of the following way would you
recommend to your friend and why?
1. Find a roommate that can share the living expenses.
2. Buy the new technology products less frequently.
3. Shop for less expensive food to cook at home.
Commonly, students with meagre pocket money seek measures to reduce their living expenses. Some people prefer to find a roomate to share living expenses, some would like to shop for cheaper food to cook. In my opinion, I believe the most effective way is to find a roomate to buy new electronic products less frequently. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following esssay.
For starters, we do not necessarily need so many electronic products to meet our primary needs. Understandably, students require laptops to take notes in classes and complete essays for graduation. However, the functions of some electronic products might overlap with each other. If someone insist on keeping pace with the trend, he will regret buying plenty of useless products. My own experience is a compelling model of that. My parents bought me a Macbook Air when I entered the university. Shortly after that, Apple company released the latest iPad. Shocked at its fascinating appearance and exciting advertisements, I used my pocket money to buy the expensive iPad Air as soon as it went to the market. However, I later found that the Macbook could perfectly satisfy my demands for studying and entertainment. Worsely, my schoolbag lacked a commodious space to accommodate a Macbook and an iPad Air at the same time. Therefore, I seldom carried the iPad with me and sold it at half of the original price 3 months later. This example shows that buying electronic products without considering other factors thoroughly is insensible.
Besides, technology products are generally expensive. If we control our desire to buy them, we can save large amounts of money and use it to do more meaningful things. For example, many people would like to buy superior acoustic equipment so that they can appreciate fantastic movies at home. However, if they go to the cinema every week instead of buying the equipment, the price of tickets will not go beyong that of the equipment. Additionally, they can also enjoy the splendid sound effect in professional theatres. Another example is about the restaurant. It cost no more than 200yuan to have some delicious dishes in a restaurant near in university. In contrast, the price of an iPhone may be over 5000yuan, 25 times of the meal price. In a word, we can cover our living expenses more easily when cutting down the expense on electronic products.
Admittedly, other measures are also worth trying to reduce the living expenses. However, they may harm the quality of our life. For instance, we may have to adjust to disparate living habit of the roomate, with whom we would like to share the rental fee. Also, cheaper food like fried chicken and chipd may not benefit our health as expensive, organic food does. In conclusion, buying fewer electronic products can save our living expenses at a minimum cost of our living quality.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'insists'.
Suggestion: insists
...ght overlap with each other. If someone insist on keeping pace with the trend, he will...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1138, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...other factors thoroughly is insensible. Besides, technology products are general...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2405.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97929606625 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74250624124 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548654244306 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.068308653 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.1666666667 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245334831307 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544911091237 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592479054172 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162368583893 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678313261064 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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