Most advertisements make the product seem much better than it really is.
For a long time, Television, as a public medium for human beings, has entertained mankind with its programs and broadcasts. Without a shadow of doubt, whether or not we accept it, Television programs, especially advertisements, has affected people’s mentality. Before proceeding further, we should define our term, advertisements are program by which individuals urge to buy products. With this in mind, some people believe that it stands to reason that "advertisements make products seem much better", while others hold the opposite view. I, personally, subscribe to the first attitude for a quite a few reasons, three substantial of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The most compelling reason is that advertisers often exaggerate about the function of products in order to stimulate individuals watching the advertisements to buy the products. They apply numerous effects so as to present their products in an excellent fashion. For example, there are a great deal of advertisements have to do with diseases such as obesity, graying of hair, and addiction. Advertising companies constantly utilize several magical effects to overstate medicines' functions, which may encourage one suffering from an illness to purchase the products to relieve his or her symptoms, and hence treat faster.
Another reasons as to why I do not concur with the latter perspective in the introductory paragraph lies in the fact that since as we all know that famous people have constantly received considerable attention in every society. Therefore, advertising companies exploit this fact in order to achieve their goals—selling their products. So, advertisers always employ celebrities in order to promote their products and make people believe that their products are great due to the fact that their heroes like them. Let me exemplify my point with a true story that happened to me: when I was in high school, Bahram Radan, one of the most famous actors in my country, performed in a commercial about orange juice. While he was lost in a desert, and he was absolutely thirsty, suddenly he saw an orange juice bottle on the ground. When he drunk it, he gave his face a huge smile creating satisfactory feeling. All of my classmates and I bought that the brand of that orange juice because we believe that it will taste great owing to the fact that our hero, Bahram Radan, liked it, but it does not seem as proper as we thought.
In summary, having considered all the aforementioned ingredients discussed above, I firmly support my point of view that advertising companies make products to look better, and I do recommend to people, when a product’s commercial appeals them, think more carefully about it and then buy it, for most products are not what we are watching in the exhibited advertisements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... broadcasts. Without a shadow of doubt, whether or not we accept it, Television programs, espe...
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Message: Did you mean 'buying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: buying
...s are program by which individuals urge to buy products. With this in mind, some peopl...
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Suggestion: to
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Message: Consider replacing "in an excellent fashion" with adverb for "excellent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...effects so as to present their products in an excellent fashion. For example, there are a great deal of...
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Suggestion: deals
...fashion. For example, there are a great deal of advertisements have to do with disea...
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Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'drank'?
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'in summary', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.218503937008 0.229887763892 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.159448818898 0.158761421928 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0748031496063 0.0866891130778 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0511811023622 0.046263068375 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0905511811024 0.0685040099705 132% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127952755906 0.118717715034 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0354330708661 0.0351676179071 101% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9903272229 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0354330708661 0.0309702414327 114% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0767716535433 0.0887237588012 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00590551181102 0.0209618222197 28% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0216535433071 0.0139019557991 156% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2794.0 2387.08602151 117% => OK
No of words: 454.0 408.028673835 111% => OK
Chars per words: 6.15418502203 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.376651982379 0.338922669872 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.295154185022 0.251872472559 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.224669603524 0.174417080927 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.151982378855 0.112833075102 135% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9903272229 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552863436123 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 66.1714132894 59.2087087015 112% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 26.7058823529 20.5533526081 130% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9239329656 48.84282405 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.352941176 120.699889404 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7058823529 20.5533526081 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.823529411765 0.644075263715 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 56.2213008551 45.7405998639 123% => OK
Elegance: 1.26797385621 1.45489161554 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193433847818 0.300154397459 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.116548690539 0.103427244359 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0942177246867 0.0752933317313 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.484999554918 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.169135896871 0.151897553556 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069888483814 0.114077575197 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731203462893 0.0781384742642 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.360529639425 0.336927656856 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.035749547673 0.067059652881 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144839414903 0.210909579961 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376664139402 0.0618886996521 61% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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