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The author in this article mentions the decrease in number of business school graduates working for large corporation in Gargantopolis. To support his claim he puts forward various evidences which made his reach his conclution. Close scrutiny of the evidences lead little credible support, which render it unconviencing as it stands.
To begin with the author mentions in his evidence that the large corporations offer much high salaries and perquisites and still concludes that this situation can be handled if corporations offer garduates more benefits. This makes the author's claim too naive to give attention to. Also, the article mentions this entire scenerio has been documented and looked into for short time of 2 years. Had the article shown more examples of facilities that a small start up provides the graduates that the big corporations don't, the author's claim could have been more substantial.
Secondly, I would like to point out that the survey that author bases his conclusion on is performed on only first year students. Future goals change while you enter the real race of life. Money becomes a very important part of career option along with job satisfaction. However if the author would have surveyed the last year students as well the entire argument would have been more persuasive.
Finally, this article relates the last two years of the corporation and start up clash. There is no mention of why the start up weren't a treat to big corporation before that. If there had been some data on the situation before that there would be some comman background to compare on. The author has to put more more light on the wherabouts of the small start ups and the big corporation before two years.
To sum it all up, I am quite unconvienced with the author's claim. To bolster his argument he has to provide more supporting evidences leading to exact cause of this situation. Only a small survey and a mental claim is unpersuasive almost every time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: Scrutiny
...es which made his reach his conclution. Close scrutiny of the evidences lead little credible s...
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Line 3, column 515, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...the graduates that the big corporations dont, the authors claim could have been more...
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Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...eer option along with job satisfaction. However if the author would have surveyed the l...
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Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had surveyed'?
Suggestion: had surveyed
...job satisfaction. However if the author would have surveyed the last year students as well the enti...
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Line 7, column 129, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...There is no mention of why the start up werent a treat to big corporation before that....
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Line 7, column 176, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...a treat to big corporation before that. If there had been some data on the situati...
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Line 7, column 308, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: more
...nd to compare on. The author has to put more more light on the wherabouts of the small st...
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Line 7, column 308, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'more' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: more
...nd to compare on. The author has to put more more light on the wherabouts of the small st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, as to, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 331.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9667673716 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6433508803 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540785498489 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0572506961 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3333333333 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3888888889 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0562925615073 0.218282227539 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0201274318037 0.0743258471296 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573198498204 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0426767323044 0.128457276422 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535074052262 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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