Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
There is no shortage of debate about whether young people take part enough in the communities or not. In my opinions, they help their communities even more than before, but it is not seen as their ways differ from the traditional ways of helping the community. I believe this way for two main reasons, which i will explain in the following essay.
First of all, there are a lot of young students in research groups and universities working on project. these works might not be seen often in the society immediately. Their results sometimes take time to be able to become practical. You can say the way to contribute to society has changed in the last decades. My own experience is a compelling example of this. As I studied in university for my master degree in architecture, I used to do a lot of research on different subjects, and the rest of my classmates acted this way, too. These researches often took time and labor to finish and most of them were not practical at the time. But others continued them later and step by step they got closer to become practical and be used in the society. although, they might not seem big help at the time of research, they contributed a lot to the community when finished and released. Now I enjoy a successful career as I have done practical research in my field of work. For this reason, I believe young people do contribute to their communities.
Secondly, the quality of work has changed in recent years. While some decades ago helping was done only in physical work and seen by people as soon as done by someone - for example someone young - Today the internet has changed everything. Working for you community might not be just physical work anymore and virtual things done in the internet cannot be simply seen by others. I can mention my cousin as an example. As he graduated from university, he started working from home as a developer, writing code for web sites and other projects. Although he earned good money and developed very well received web sites, his family and friends often thought he was just playing around on the internet and not doing anything important. His work were not simply seen by others as the way people help their communities has changed in the past years. virtual work has taken over the physical world. Accordingly, I think younger people of our societies still contribute to our communities but in a different way.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that your people these days spend enough time to help their communities. This is because that young people works and contribution takes time to become practical and lots of them are doing research and working on projects. And also because the quality of helping has changed and become virtual and it is not seen as easily by others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71340206186 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5974929183 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461855670103 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3446872213 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9230769231 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6538461538 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42307692308 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253091839081 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747686621901 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978231899078 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19842470335 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923361222599 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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