Two years ago the city council voted to prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza.
They claimed that skateboard users were responsible for litter and vandalism that were keeping other visitors from coming to the plaza.
In the past two years, however, there has been only a small increase in the number of visitors to Central Plaza, and litter and vandalism are still problematic.
Skateboarding is permitted in Monroe Park, however, and there is no problem with litter or vandalism there. In order to restore Central Plaza to its former glory,
then, we recommend that the city lift its prohibition on skateboarding in the plaza.
The author of this argument recommended that city should lift its prohibition on skateboarding in the plaza. The author gives few assumptions why he holding this recommendation. This argument is flawed and illogical as the author does not provide enough information. Therefore the entire argument is not really convincing and unsound.
First, the author mention that two years ago the city council voted to prohibit skateboarding in central plaza because there are increase in number of skateboard users and even they are responsible for litter and vandalism.But question arises here that, how the skateboard users and litter or vandalism directly connected. However there is no proof that these skateboard user are really responsible for this litter and vandalism. Furthermore, the author mention that because of this vandalism and litter number of visitors reduced in central plaza. Reduction in number of visitors may be have several other reasons like may be central plaza shops selling products at high price and customer don't want to spend that much amount or may be central plaza shops does not have new stock they are just selling old stocks etc.. Thus author does not given enough evidence to conclude that reduction in number of visitors in central plaza is directly connected with skateboard users and litter and vandalism.To make any further conclusion we need more detail information.
Secondly, the author mention that there is a small number of increase in central plaza but litter and vandalism are still problematic. Even the city prohibited skateboard users in central plaza there are still litter and vandalism is problem but even with this problem the number of customer is increased.That means littering and vandalism is not directly connected with skateboard users. Moreover , even increase in small number of visitors may have different reason for instance central plaza shops giving big discount or they stock-up with new and latest products , and may be it is not connected with skateboarding prohibition. Therefore this assumption is not conniving that prohibiting skateboard will increase the number of visitors in central plaza.
Third, the author recommended that even skateboarding is permitted in Monroe Park there is no problem with litter or vandalism.However the author fails to provide the evidence that in Monroe Park number of visitors has increased because their Is no problem of litter and vandalism even if skateboarding is permitted there.And on the basis of this recommendation author fails to convince that lifting ban is the only way to restore central plaza to its former glory. It looks contradictory with the claim that they have mention that skateboard users are responsible for litter and vandalism that were keeping other visitors from coming to the plaza. The author ignores other ways available that will help to restore Central plaza to its former glory for example opening of new shops , movie theater in central plaza, play station for kids. Thus here author fails to convince that skateboard users are only reason for less number of visitors.
In conclusion , the argument is not really convincing and author needs to answer above mention points.The author need to provide more information that how Monrore park is working even they are permitted with skateboard users.And author much provide evidence why less people are visiting Central plaza.Therefore to make any further conclusion for lifting ban on skateboard user in Central plaza author need to provide more evidence.
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Essay evaluation report
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this essay needs to prove that the city should not lift its prohibition on skateboarding in the plaza..
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 568 350
No. of Characters: 2928 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.882 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.155 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.613 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 223 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 163 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.836 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.4 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.591 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 11.1786427146 242% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2981.0 2260.96107784 132% => OK
No of words: 559.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33273703041 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79940222114 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.364937388193 0.468620217663 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 923.4 705.55239521 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.725195993 57.8364921388 200% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 165.611111111 119.503703932 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0555555556 23.324526521 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 5.70786347227 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 5.25449101796 495% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383533126584 0.218282227539 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155946786202 0.0743258471296 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123379538023 0.0701772020484 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223002876089 0.128457276422 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107906557274 0.0628817314937 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 14.3799401198 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 48.3550499002 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.23 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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