It is easier to be educated nowadays
Education has always been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over the difficulty of education in the age of electronic products. In many people's views, they believe the education is easier now based on the network and electron devices. Contrary to these people's vews is my perspective that education is harder than before, due to the danger of capacity of self-capacity and competition.
To begin with, nowadays, competition in the examination had already increased essentially, which caused children should spend more time and cost more effort in study to competite with others. Hence, the existence of electron devices become the most vital difficuties for study hardly. Children spend too much time in it, which will waste the valueble time for study, and influnce the performance for examinations. For example, my little brother, who was faced the examnination for entrance of high school failed in the final examination. During last 1 month, other students spended more time on study, but he still spended for 3 hours in tik-tok. Others were progress, but he was lag behind. Finally, he didn't enter to his dream school. Hence, electron devices waste too many time for student to competite with others.
Secondly, the time spend on the electron devices will also caused children lose their ability of self-control, which will take nagetive effect in the future. The happiness taken from the game or phone stimulate them and spur them to play it all the time whereever they are, which means they can't control them self. For example, my uncle who was a super game fun in his child life. He couldn't control him self when he was young, which lasted until he become an adult. Now, he become a fat man with high-blood pressure, and diabetes due to the unsuccessfully food control which is part of ability of self-control. So, it will promot children losed their capacity of self-control.
Although, in some way, I admit that use electron devices moderately can help children to develop their interests, and find the answer of problems more quickly. However, I believe the potential harm for children is more dangerous, to avoid these danger I mentioned in previous passage, parent should spend more energy to faced the diffculties of education.
- Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child (ages 5 to 10)? Why?1)Being helpful to others2)Being honest3)Being well-organizedUse specific examples and evidences to support your answer. " 90
- TPO32 Integrate writing 73
- TPO30 integrated writing 70
- Some people believe it is a good idea to use cameras to watch and record people’s activities in public since it can increase safety; others think it has too many negative consequences and should not be used. Which do you prefer and why? 90
- Nowadays it is easier to maintain good health than in the past 94
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...me the most vital difficuties for study hardly. Children spend too much time in it, wh...
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Line 3, column 705, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ess, but he was lag behind. Finally, he didnt enter to his dream school. Hence, elect...
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Line 3, column 772, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...hool. Hence, electron devices waste too many time for student to competite with others. ...
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Line 5, column 60, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...spend on the electron devices will also caused children lose their ability of self-con...
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Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...me whereever they are, which means they cant control them self. For example, my uncl...
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Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... a super game fun in his child life. He couldnt control him self when he was young, whi...
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Line 7, column 240, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this danger' or 'these dangers'?
Suggestion: this danger; these dangers
...or children is more dangerous, to avoid these danger I mentioned in previous passage, parent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08064516129 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69763388571 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559139784946 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7629026262 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4736842105 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5789473684 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0514452857668 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0202518929918 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503304776761 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0507523899545 0.150856017488 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879057180067 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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