After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Everyone has their own lifestyle, and it is difficult to accommodate all of them. Some people believe that students should take a year break following their high school before starting their work or university. On the other hand, I believe that students should start working or studying undergraduate level after finishing the high school. There are some reasons why I feel this way, which will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the modern world is competitive, and students will lose their professional and academic opportunities if they take a long break following graduation. To be more specific, over the past few decades the number of graduated students who are unemployment have increased because there is not enough job opportunities for them. Moreover, having a year off after high school will destroy some funding opportunities because many professor are willing to work with enthusiastic student who want to start university immediately after finishing high school. My own experience is a compelling example of that. After finishing high school, I found a job in a technology firm, but I preferred to take a break to relax before starting the work. When I returned my country from Denmark, I did not find a proper job because for a specific position there were about twenty applicants. I would have had better professional opportunity if I had started working after graduation.
Second, being away from academic environment will change study habits of students, which will lead to some major problems. After taking a long break following high school, students will be lazy to start studying their lessons, and they prefer to postpone it for several years. Moreover, student forget some fundamental academic subjects which is mandatory for upper academic levels. For example, when I arrived from a foreign country that I mentioned above, I preferred to continue my academic studies because of the lack of job opportunities. During the first semester, in particular, I had major problems to solve long divisions. Since it was a fundamental math knowledge, my professor suggested me to take pre-mathematic class which cause a long graduation period and low grades. As a result, this long vacation brought about some detrimental consequences for my academic life.
In conclusion, considering all the above mentioned reason, I believe that students should start working or studying in university after high school. That is because they can find better jobs as a result of high competiveness, and also do not forget their lessons.
- After completing high school students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university 73
- movies and televisions have negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave 76
- the best to relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone 76
- it is better for students to start school late in the morning 73
- the rules that societies expect young people to follow are not too restrict 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 245, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ecades the number of graduated students who are unemployment have increased because the...
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Line 2, column 431, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun professor seems to be countable; consider using: 'many professors'.
Suggestion: many professors
...troy some funding opportunities because many professor are willing to work with enthusiastic s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in particular, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22926829268 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92756494819 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5604719888 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.2 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278704231452 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916456227245 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103856400224 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202987079154 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616547958603 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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