movies and televisions have negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave
It is critically important that parents provide children with some entertainment under their control. I believe that movies and televisions have more negative effects on children's behavior than the positive points they contain. I feel this way by two reasons why I believe that, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, when children spend a considerable amount of time watching TV, they will suffer some inevitable consequences, such as health problems. Watching the movie for a long time reduces their daily physical activity; moreover, since they eat some detrimental foods during that time, they probably would gain weight. Not only that, but sitting at a short distance from the TV reduces their visual power, and children are forced to use eyeglasses when they are still at low ages. My personal experience is a compelling example of that. When I was a child, I used to watch my favorite cartoon after school. In particular, I spend an enormous amount of time watching TV and eating potatoes. Unfortunately, I gained lots of weight because of the sedentary lifestyle, and I couldn't play with my classmate at school. Furthermore, I felt that it was hard to read the textbooks or some sentences on TV or newspaper because of weak visual power. I would not have suffered that consequences if I spent less time watching TV.
Second, TV programs have some unsuitable effects on children's behavior and way of thinking since they do not separate programs based on allowable age. In a hectic life, parents spend their time at work, and as a result, they are not able to have surveillance of children's behavior. In that situation, children spend much time with TV programs rather than their parents; therefore, they will learn a lot of inconvenient things, which are not suitable for them at that age. However, if the TV administrators divide programs on TV based on the allowable age, there will not be any guarantee to avoid children from following them. For instance, my little brother followed the behavior of the prisoners in prison break serial without any awareness about the meaning of that behavior. At that time, his teachers invited us to explain some unsuitable behavior that bothered other students at school. When we restricted the time of watching TV and also programs that he was able to follow, we preserve him from some vulnerabilities in the future.
In conclusion, I believe that TV programs have more negative effects on children than positive ones. That is because they have some unavoidable effect on their health and their behavior.
- After completing high school students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university 73
- movies and televisions have negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave 76
- the rules that societies expect young people to follow are not too restrict 70
- government shold provide internet free such as public services as highways 61
- the best to relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 767, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...cause of the sedentary lifestyle, and I couldnt play with my classmate at school. Furth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00700934579 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78385766971 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502336448598 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2804764444 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.047619048 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.380952381 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137947659881 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055897260631 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108249733653 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157265849365 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122252127111 0.0645574589148 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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