Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Deterring would-be criminals from a young age has always been an important mission of society. As a result, some people claim that felons who have rehabilitated and reassimilated into law-abiding citizens are the most appropriate ones to warn the teenageers about the ramifications of committing crimes. From my point of view, I am, however, of the opinion that there are better ways to educate the children rather than having the criminals.
Admittedly, those ex-convicts can be the most reflective mirror for children to look up as they have suffered the consequences of doing infraction. Since the inmates have spent astronomical time in the prison, they know what it takes to pay for the price of being a criminal and have a better awareness about that. Undoubtedly, their stories are the most reliable and valid, so the teenagers will believe and become more influenced by the stories. As a result, children can gain better awareness about the consequences of committing grave offences.
However, I believe there are a multitude of methods to mould children into law-abiding citizens. Students can learn about crimes and justice when they go to schools. Teachers do not only impart better knowledge with examples and explanations, but they also have more respect from the children, so the young will be more likely to listen and understand the lessons. Moreover, with the proliferation of the Internet, children can easily get access to what are the moral values and why they should not practise wrong-doings. According to some surveys at high schools, 80% of the students have made research themselves on the sanctions they have to bear if they commit crimes, so they become more aware of their actions. Without a doubt, those ways can be more justifiable and safer for the children.
In conclusion, although the influence of some ex-inmates, who have reintegrate into the society with remorse, is undeniable, I am convinced that there are more suitable methods to educate adolescents about the dangers of practising offences, including the learning from school and the use of the internet.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 68, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'reintegrated'.
Suggestion: reintegrated
... influence of some ex-inmates, who have reintegrate into the society with remorse, is unden...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, moreover, so, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18181818182 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88958256418 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557184750733 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3604273194 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.214285714 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3571428571 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176191954289 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603788508773 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054729188939 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115091326016 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342334669781 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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