The best curriculum is not one based on a static body of knowledge, but one which teaches students to cope with change. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The younger generation is the future; therefore, they always obtain the world’s attention in a lot of spheres, especially in education. Some people say that the optimal academic programme should teach students how to adapt to adjustments instead of providing a fundamental source of information. I disagree with this argument, and I will explain the reasons in the following paragraphs.
Traditional education provides children with the necessary information and skills in order to grow up and develop the ability to learn advanced knowledge in later life. First, fundamental information ranging from literate to basic math, science, and biology assist them to integrate more easily with the world. Moreover, in the future, without this knowledge, they cannot apply for higher education, for example, graduated or post-graduated. As a result, they may be unemployed. Secondly, the conventional curriculum at schools also helps children obtain practical skills, such as problem-solving, time-management, and interpersonal skills, that will give them the capacity to overcome difficult situations they may encounter in their lives. Besides, with these skills and knowledge, they will become confident, civilized, and intellectual people.
Admittedly, the world is changing every day; therefore, learning new information and skills is also needed. Computer and technology skills, for example, or basic economics knowledge. However, it is hard to absorb this new knowledge without a basic understanding.
In conclusion, everyone needs static background information because it helps them understand the fundamental rules that govern the planet. Children should learn this information in their curriculum at school before they learn any others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...knowledge without a basic understanding. In conclusion, everyone needs static bac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.87401574803 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19097827706 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614173228346 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1615786475 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.769230769 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0769230769 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0816782452602 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0286354306022 0.084324248473 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.024018993706 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0505877519171 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0143174104428 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.77 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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