In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing
The mayor suggests that encouraging autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in their town would help tackle the serious enemployment issue they are facing and would also help develop hillview landfill and asks for a campaign by city council to attract the company as well as offer significant tax incentives .To properly analyse the mayor's argument certain uestions need to be answered first.
Firstly,In case the plant is set in the town are the people in the town who are unemployed skilled enough to work there .what if the company autotech sets its manufacturing plant in hillview landfield yet is unsuccesfull to find skilled labour force to work in their plants.
As is mentioned in the original text thousands of hillview residents were left unemployed after Comptechcomputer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year ,so the people in the town were used to working for this computer software company and do not have any experience in working in an automobile manufacturing plant.In this case the author's reccomendation stands faulty.
Secondly,the author says hillview landfill is a perfect site to build this plant although there is no evidence to support for the same,there is no systematic study or research done that can strengthen this claim .what if the area is not fit for the plant and the company finds it uneconomical to make a plant there due to various reasons like unavailibility of power or no proper transport facilities or too far from its distribution markets.The author needs to consider a lot of points and do a lot of research to back up his claim of hillview being a good option to set a plant for autotech.
Lastly,The mayor asks the city council to give tax incentives to attract this company without mentioning how much incentive and is it going to be profitable in the long run to provide employment.The mayor should definitely look into how much tax incentive will they be comfortable in giving to the company without causing any major financial issue or loss of money.
In conclusion i would like to say that the mayor's arguments are based on several unwarrented assumptions and lack enough research in the form of information and figures .
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1830 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.88 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.836 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 53.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.98 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.461 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.774 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1860.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05434782609 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94529954397 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535326086957 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 61.0 22.8473053892 267% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 129.816216244 57.8364921388 224% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 310.0 119.503703932 259% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 61.3333333333 23.324526521 263% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.1666666667 5.70786347227 318% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286509928105 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131930416956 0.0743258471296 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926623212279 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131930416956 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0926623212279 0.0628817314937 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.0 14.3799401198 229% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 9.56 48.3550499002 20% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.1 12.197005988 222% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.9 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.18 8.32208582834 122% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.4 11.1389221557 237% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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