Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, language, science, and history.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the growth stage of children, it is undoubtedly a good thing to learn more subjects. Parents don't know what their children will become, if their children grow up as artists or musicians, then art and music classes are essential to them while their children are toddlers. Some think that due to the development of the society, all students should focus on practical subjects, so music and art classes are useless. However, I believe toddlers need the access to music and art classes cause of these following contentions.
First of all, studying art and music classes could expand children’s social circle. When you have the same hobbies as several classmates or in the same interest class, some can become friends. It's like when we speak the same language, it's convenient to communicate. Also, Learning music is conducive to children's concentration, while cultivating good social and expression skills.
Secondly, music and art enhance creativity, children develop innovation skills when they’re encouraged to express themselves and take risks in creating art and playing music. For example, in art there are abstract paintings, those require creativity inside. Art and music skills can open doors later in life, hence, learning art and music is exceptionally great.
Thirdly, children’s brains develop faster with music, particularly in areas associated with language acquisition and reading skills. For young children, making arts provides opportunities for language development, toddlers could learn words for colors and shapes as they create art. In music, children learn to read scores and music terms. Clearly, music and art classes really help pupils.
To sum up, learning art and music expand children’s social circle, enhance children’s creativity and also develop reading and language skills. Some people say we need to focus on practical subjects, but I want to say, learning art and music could help children on practical subjects. So, younger school children should be required to study art and music in addition to math, language, science, and history.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...d thing to learn more subjects. Parents dont know what their children will become, i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, for example, in addition, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74614307259 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556923076923 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2824140187 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2222222222 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0555555556 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23897379848 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925599849058 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072359020272 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151749858568 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534424171196 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.