Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
"Follow your dreams" means gaining happiness in situation but only if dreams are idealistic. Young people often follow their dreams but don't emphasis on picking worthy goals. The prompt recommends that students or teenagers are not attacking this point and simply choosing a path that is most likely of their dreams. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this suggestion and argue that students should look inward rather than outward for two reasons with given reason for the claim.
To begin, due to today's fast growing technology and high competition young people should always be caution on picking goals about their dreams. In simple words as there are many career options student's should be aware of choosing right path and not simply follow their dreams. For example, a student who is having interest in fashion designing is dreaming to work at great "GUCCI" company. But he does not have knowledge about whole process of studying and even he is not good at drawing. Now this scenario will create a huge problem for that student. As though he has vast amount of interest and wants to accomplish his goals but he does not emphasis on it's circumstances and simply wants to pursue it without having basic but very important skills like drawing. So simply choosing goal with great interest will be very daunting for him in future.
Furthermore, environment is also a great factor which brings a change to young people. As if environment or surrounding will influence a child to bring it's growth as one needs to have good scenario to bring positiveness with great success. For instance, a child who is surrounded by poor financial condition will always be taught to be very hard working, with studying so much that it brings their household condition to better place. While a student who has great amount of richness nature due to getting lot's of pampering by their parents, might be very independent and use his bad attitude towards others. So it totally depends on situation surrounded by child to bring happiness and success in future terms, as even though having interest or dreams if one does not work hard, it will bring huge loss in his life.
In addition, the reason stated suggest that many people's dreams are inherently selfish. I prefer that this it true in many cases, consider a case where one person who is told that- today our country needs only computer engineering students and it will have great success in coming years. Now that students will get a mind set that if he becomes computer engineer he would gain lots of money and so he has a scenario in mind that his dream is pursing this. But he does not have idea that actually he is not listening his heart, he is listening his mind and forcefully having this dreams. So sometimes people don't actually dream they just use inheritance and starts to pursue goals in that even though not having needed interest and knowledge.
However some argue that in this competing world it is better to go with dreams so success will be higher but practical paths consider to have knowledge also with interest. Though in our interest we can give more than hundred percent efforts, but if we have knowledge than only this is possible. If everyone starts to think practically rather than following simply their dreams, it will lead to bring huge success.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ng people often follow their dreams but dont emphasis on picking worthy goals. The p...
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Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to right'
Suggestion: to right
...ns students should be aware of choosing right path and not simply follow their dreams...
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Line 3, column 849, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... interest will be very daunting for him in future. Furthermore, environment is also a ...
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Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'trues'?
Suggestion: trues
...herently selfish. I prefer that this it true in many cases, consider a case where on...
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Line 7, column 608, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...having this dreams. So sometimes people dont actually dream they just use inheritanc...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...aving needed interest and knowledge. However some argue that in this competing world...
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Line 9, column 218, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...h in our interest we can give more than hundred percent efforts, but if we have knowled...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in many cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2772.0 2235.4752809 124% => OK
No of words: 570.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86315789474 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51306466255 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457894736842 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 814.5 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0376815092 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.5 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196149932622 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070266379809 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810081537638 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11905358065 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593567526369 0.0667264976115 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.