Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.
Why do you think this is the case?
What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Since the age of machinery has begun, more and more people, especially the young one enjoyed meeting their friends online instead of face-to-face communication. There are many reasons relate to this. Besides, this situation might be one of the most popular reasons why human cannot develop anymore. Therefore, I think the government should take some actions to encourage the teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person.
To begin with, one of the reason for this problem is the lack of interaction with the real life. Within the fast development of technology, a lot of kids have a chance to experience many different kind of social application such as YouTube, Facebook, TikTok, Twitter, Instagram. Those apps was easily to download, to use and to addicted. Besides, now there are many types of portable technology like smartphones or laptops and many people believe that contacting by phone is more convenient than meeting directly. For example, they think that chitting and chatting or have a video call help them to save money for food and drinks. Another reason is they are scare or even hate the real world, they just want to live in their own imaginary with the Internet to the rest of their life.
The solution of this problem need a tight collaboration between school and family with the help of the government. First of all, parents should spend more time and become a good example for their children. Instead of using smartphones to entertain they can hang out for a walk or prepare a meal together. Many researches claim that children's attitude is affected by the person who bring up them. After that, school can organize some meeting to talk about the drawbacks of the technology and to attatch the pupils together.
To conclude, although mobile phones brings to humans a lot of benefits, the overusing situation of this device for contacting is decreasing gradually the connection among people. Therefore, every individual should take into consideration this circumstance and make the right solutions by themselves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...lot of kids have a chance to experience many different kind of social application such as YouT...
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Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[5]
Message: You should probably use: 'were'.
Suggestion: were
... TikTok, Twitter, Instagram. Those apps was easily to download, to use and to addic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, so, therefore, for example, i think, kind of, such as, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07692307692 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71169945967 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58875739645 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8126234089 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.941176471 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257725130563 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776351302782 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926747167018 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154711217533 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142743353433 0.056905535591 251% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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