Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is agrued that some individuals who have been in prison become helpful citizens later and many people believe that these are the best method to transmit to adolesence about the dangers of committing a crime. From my point of view, at some situation i mostly agree with this notion because of its benefits for the teenager development. The following will analyse this statement in detail.
First of all, in the international world and with the appearence of new innovation that a various of citizens and occupation have been replaced by modern teachnology and crime will appear more frequenly, so advice of well-reformed prisoners is hugely significant for postgraduates. Not only can they provide numerous social knowledge to cope with the risk crime in the worse situation, but also the social-evil will be encouranged to avoide such as drugs, nicotein or other types of addicted. Furthermore, experience can be supported for the children by the older generation, providing a plenty of social knowledge and valueable information. To illustrate, there was a vurvey by Tony Kross, the famous scientist and professor which was about the sucess of teenagers in London who listen to that advice. The statistic showed that nearly everyone has got a various of achevement in their career.
However, we can not negate the drawback of this problem for the social. Parent can not all believe in these people because bad habits will not easy to alter, and also harmful influence can be led by their action or behave. Morover, some information can affect children mentality, lacking their creative, growth and improvement.
To conclude, by my agrument from the essay that i totally agree with this statement, but it still have some negatve aspect for teenagers. The manager of education need to have clear plans to advance their student for the nation developent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, well, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11513157895 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81574143774 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601973684211 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9168605997 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.615384615 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215342692739 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691176239053 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116475565703 0.0667982634062 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137601111157 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119032964464 0.056905535591 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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