Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial
support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree
with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
In modern society where social resources are limited and not unevenly distributed, there is a claim that the major cities are aided with sufficient financial resources from the governments because the culture there can be produced and preserved. In my opinion, it is undeniably true that culture preservation and inheritance in cities can not be separated from financial support; however, apart from the cities,there are also some other areas possessing nation’s cultural traditions that are preserved and generated. Some remote areas with a long history may also give birth to more valuable national cultures.
In the first place,urban prosperity is significant for the preservation and development of international culture.There are are many ample historic sites in the major cities such as ancient colosseum in Roman,Arch of Triumph and Notre Dame Cathedral in Paris.And the government funds can be used to improve the construction of protection facilities. Due to these facilities, major cities have the capacity to maintain large museums and libraries in order to store artifacts and books.Assumed that if the governments can provide abundant and stable financial support,the cities could thrive and civilization created by mankind can be continued.
That being said, the argument above assumes that the cities are the main birthplaces of cultural traditions, so the government would give a lot of financial support to preserve the culture in these cities.This assumption, however, could be wrong. Even though a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated in cities, there are also abundant culture traditions with the equal importance in some small cities and even rural areas in the countries with a long history.These precious cultures also need to be preserved and need the support of material basis.However,because the governments with limited financial resources have to have a certain degree of preference for development of the major cities in the financial budget,the culture in rural cities is generally not able to get sufficient support.
Even if certain financial support is helpful for cultural preservation, the support is not enough,in the meantime adequate means for preservation are also essential. Relevant experts need to formulate the right plan for cultural protection and be supported financially the restoration, repair or renovation of ancient buildings or cultural relics by governments. For example,the funds can help to search for historical relics, but they may still be damaged if they are unearthed without timely and effective protection measures.Notre Dame Cathedral has been spending a lot of money on maintenance, but its history and culture were destroyed by fires because of potential circuit problems.
To summarize,although how to preserve and inherit the culture still needs to be discussed, it is not wise to simply put money into the big cities to achieve cultural preservation and inheritance. In fact, the cultures is distributed in different areas and diverse in forms, which must be analyzed according to the situation of different countries. Only by adopting the correct means and reasonable allocation of funds can the culture protection be fully realized.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...iumph and Notre Dame Cathedral in Paris.And the government funds can be used to imp...
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...s in order to store artifacts and books.Assumed that if the governments can provide abu...
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... preservation, the support is not enough,in the meantime adequate means for preserv...
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...for cultural protection and be supported financially the restoration, repair or r...
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...tural relics by governments. For example,the funds can help to search for historical...
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...imely and effective protection measures.Notre Dame Cathedral has been spending a lot ...
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...ential circuit problems. To summarize,although how to preserve and inherit the culture...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, apart from, for example, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2743.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56389452333 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19379554365 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48275862069 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 873.9 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 23.0359550562 161% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 118.051588362 60.3974514979 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 211.0 118.986275619 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.9230769231 23.4991977007 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46153846154 5.21951772744 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322888679623 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123440452975 0.0831039109588 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067964094945 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189174895265 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574581075598 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.7 14.1392134831 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 17.0 48.8420337079 35% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 12.1743820225 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.56 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.2143820225 150% => OK
text_standard: 24.0 11.7820224719 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 411, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
... support; however, apart from the cities,there are also some other areas possessing na...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , urban
...national cultures. In the first place,urban prosperity is significant for the prese...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...nd development of international culture.There are are many ample historic sites in th...
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Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: are
...elopment of international culture.There are are many ample historic sites in the major ...
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Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Arch
...ities such as ancient colosseum in Roman,Arch of Triumph and Notre Dame Cathedral in ...
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Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...iumph and Notre Dame Cathedral in Paris.And the government funds can be used to imp...
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Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Assumed
...s in order to store artifacts and books.Assumed that if the governments can provide abu...
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Line 3, column 565, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...de abundant and stable financial support,the cities could thrive and civilization cr...
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Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...to preserve the culture in these cities.This assumption, however, could be wrong. Ev...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...n, however, could be wrong. Even though a nations cultural traditions are preserved and g...
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Line 5, column 477, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: These
...as in the countries with a long history.These precious cultures also need to be prese...
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Line 5, column 566, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
... and need the support of material basis.However,because the governments with limited fi...
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Line 5, column 573, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , because
...ed the support of material basis.However,because the governments with limited financial ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 734, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...the major cities in the financial budget,the culture in rural cities is generally no...
^^^^
Line 7, column 98, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
... preservation, the support is not enough,in the meantime adequate means for preserv...
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Line 7, column 257, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...for cultural protection and be supported financially the restoration, repair or r...
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Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...tural relics by governments. For example,the funds can help to search for historical...
^^^^
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Notre
...imely and effective protection measures.Notre Dame Cathedral has been spending a lot ...
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Line 9, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , although
...ential circuit problems. To summarize,although how to preserve and inherit the culture...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, apart from, for example, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2743.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56389452333 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19379554365 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48275862069 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 873.9 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 23.0359550562 161% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 118.051588362 60.3974514979 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 211.0 118.986275619 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.9230769231 23.4991977007 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46153846154 5.21951772744 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322888679623 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123440452975 0.0831039109588 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067964094945 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189174895265 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574581075598 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.7 14.1392134831 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 17.0 48.8420337079 35% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 12.1743820225 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.56 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.2143820225 150% => OK
text_standard: 24.0 11.7820224719 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.