People s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure to address the most compelling reas

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most
compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

With the rise in violent crimes becoming a worrying trend affecting society, there have been extensive debates on whether such criminal activities are influenced by society or a product of the person's own choices. The prompt suggests that people's reaction to various scenarios is largely not a product of their own making but is influenced by factors that lie outside her control. In my opinion, I mostly agree with the aforementioned statement, and will provide a possible counterargument and an argument to refute the previous claim.

It can be claimed that a person's reaction to various life scenarios is largely a product of their own choices, and there is unquestionably some truth to the argument. For instance, hardened convicts has been often been found to have a tumultuous upbringing, with instances of separated parents, early exposure to criminal activity and abusive relationships commonplace. Now, one can argue that while such conditions can have a lasting effect on a person's mind, not every person exposed to such hardships falls into a life of criminal activity. This shows that such criminals could have chosen to make their condition better and live a normal life, but turned to a life of immorality instead.

However, while a person's choices evidently determine the course of her life, it cannot be denied that exposure to such unfortunate incidents at an early age leaves an enduring impact on the child's psyche. Moreover, this is especially true for children in the teenage or young adult age groups, where immaturity and a lack of direction makes these children susceptible to immoral influences. Without a stable family to keep them in check, these teenage kids might ultimately get biased and turn to a life of criminal activities.

In a nutshell, even though a convict is fully responsible for the crimes she committed because she chose to do so, the influence of adverse scenarios in such a person's life cannot be ignored. It is the responsibility of society as a whole to provide a safe and healthy environment for our children, to ensure that they become responsible and empathetic citizens of their country.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ious claim. It can be claimed that a persons reaction to various life scenarios is l...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has often been
...gument. For instance, hardened convicts has been often been found to have a tumultuous upbring...
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Line 7, column 161, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...nfluence of adverse scenarios in such a persons life cannot be ignored. It is the respo...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 352.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10795454545 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90100082474 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568181818182 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 23.0542837668 60.3974514979 38% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 149.833333333 118.986275619 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117021568623 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482308121538 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400705225939 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745284267989 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383000265018 0.0667264976115 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.8420337079 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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