As major cities around the world are growing, so are their problems. What are these problems for young people living in cities? What are possible solutions for these problems?
The challenges that major towns face on a global scale are getting worse as they are growing. In my standpoint, some significant effects can be derived from this phenomenon and the problems-related alternatives which I will elucidate in the subsequenting paragraph
First, an issue that is emerging within the city tends to bring out fierce job competitions due to nepotism ingrained in corporate culture and politics, exacerbating youngsters to strive for pursuing well-paid professions. Evidently, thousands of Chinese migrants dominate mining and refining companies in Indonesia. Moreover, in acculturation context, juveniles likely fall into delinquency because of city living promiscuity. The more non-native inhabitants settling in an area, the more foreign culture will be diffused inside it. For instance, Turkey, the predominantly Muslim population, has the most sexual partners because of the foreign influence perpetuating inappropriate stereotypes and the loss of unique cultural beliefs
Regarding the solutions, the government should provide employment training for young people to flourish human resources. As implemented in the UK government, employers are mandated to spend a half of their annual pay bill to support training and employment. In addition, a family’s responsibility based on proper child-rearing methods is to foster intensive conversation with their metropolitan kids. Simultaneously, they tend to consider their options by defining the positive and negative impacts of deviant actions. For example, democratic parenting systems value communication in which this results in children being responsible for and aware of the needs of their future will.
In conclusion, serious issues in major towns arise from the negative results ranging from fierce competition for employment to sexual intercourse. Meanwhile, the measures referring to the problems that we could see are providing more apprenticeships and supportive encouragement from families.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.97894736842 5.12529762239 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33974637019 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.677192982456 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.1009818218 49.4020404114 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178669423773 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050921690501 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371271137726 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0907440974748 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174311894171 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.75 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.7 12.4159519038 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.43 8.58950901804 133% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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