A competitive environment in school and university would bring excellence and need to be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A competitive environment in school and university would bring excellence and need to be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there is a growing competition between students. Some people say that it is important for the pupils to have competitive environment while others oppose this statement. This is the topic of discussion in many forums and a reasoned unanimous conclusive argument is yet to be achieved. The below write-up will put forth my views on the same followed by a reasoned conclusion.
There are many reasons due to which I think that competition should not be supported. First and foremost, every student has his own ability and it creates stress and hypertension on them. To exemplify, parents create study pressure on their child at the time of exams for good marks.
Moreover, some individuals might be good at other activities rather than studies. Maybe, they obtain their goals differently when compared to studious people. For instance, Albert Einstein was not good in studies as he was not able to remember facts and figures, but he was the inventor of Gravity.
Therefore, a competitive environment would never bring good results. Rather, due to this surrounding, individuals will not be able to give their best.
At last, the points discussed above are convincing enough to elaborate my views and I would like to accentuate the fact that, excellence is achieved by hard work apart from the competition.

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Average: 5.5 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, apart from, for instance, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 5.94088669951 84% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 20.9802955665 95% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 31.9359605911 91% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.75862068966 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1100.0 1207.87684729 91% => OK
No of words: 216.0 242.827586207 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09259259259 5.00649968141 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.92707691288 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83442244863 2.71678728327 104% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 139.433497537 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.662037037037 0.580463131201 114% => OK
syllable_count: 342.9 379.143842365 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.6157635468 43% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.5024630542 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3455993211 50.4703680194 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6153846154 104.977214359 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6153846154 20.9669160288 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 7.25397266985 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.33497536946 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126370777337 0.242375264174 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475443720089 0.0925447433944 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583584872109 0.071462118173 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0735679157123 0.151781067708 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516036648958 0.0609392437508 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 12.6369458128 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.1260098522 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.9458128079 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 11.5310837438 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32886699507 105% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 55.0591133005 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.94827586207 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.3980295567 81% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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