A competitive environment in school and university would bring excellence and need to be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A competitive environment in school and university would bring excellence and need to be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

An environment in school and university plays an important role in influencing human behavior towards the society. Therefore, in this case, the environment should allow people in school to develop their individual skills rather than getting busy competing with each other. While some might agree to have a competitive environment in school and university, I believe, having such environment will not lead any good for the people in such places.

Schools and University are the places where one get educated. In such places, if one starts competing with other fellow mates then one might not concentrate on developing their special skill set which he might be known for, but to waste time and energy on something which he is not good at. Also, in this fight of competing one might get emotional trauma hence losing focus in self-development. This overall states how one might get distracted in school and university if competitive environments are encouraged, also it defies the sole purpose of the school and university for what it is meant for.

Furthermore, competitive environment influences a person in school and university in bad ways such as, will not be amicable with the surroundings they live in because every moment they will treat their environment as a competitive ground which is not always the case. Also, such environment will affect one person mind and may always give priority to fight than to understand the problem. As schools and university have the responsibility to not only educate but also to make better humans so as to serve this civilization, competition will not allow such thing to happen.

To conclude, University and school should not promote competition but should concentrate on individual's development which will lead to a better world and better development of skills for an individual.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... educate but also to make better humans so as to serve this civilization, competition wi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 93, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...e competition but should concentrate on individuals development which will lead to a better...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, as to, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.5418719212 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 6.10837438424 246% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 8.36945812808 167% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 5.94088669951 84% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 20.9802955665 67% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 31.9359605911 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.75862068966 226% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1207.87684729 127% => OK
No of words: 296.0 242.827586207 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18918918919 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95887319875 2.71678728327 109% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 139.433497537 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510135135135 0.580463131201 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 487.8 379.143842365 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.6157635468 43% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.5024630542 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.9158694477 50.4703680194 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.636363636 104.977214359 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9090909091 20.9669160288 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 7.25397266985 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212867300131 0.242375264174 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094418000416 0.0925447433944 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650162682588 0.071462118173 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135103956855 0.151781067708 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343245989831 0.0609392437508 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 12.6369458128 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.1260098522 85% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.54236453202 199% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.9458128079 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 11.5310837438 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.32886699507 96% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 55.0591133005 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.94827586207 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.3980295567 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.5123152709 124% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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