Young people who commit serious crimes such as a rubbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Juvenile delinquency is becoming an increase concerns. Some people claim that lenient sentence can not curb the major crimes. As far as I am concerned, I can not totally agree with this.
The reason of advocate of the harsh punishment is that the practice an feasible way of deterring the adolescents from reoffending. Besides, it is extremely unfair for the victims if the criminals who committed the major crime escaped from the sentence just simply because they are still young. Heinous acts should be punished regardless of the age.Moreover, without the harsh punishment, the teenager would not realize the serious after effect of their heinous crimes and leave the victims and their families suffering. Simply, the best solution is treat them adult if the crimes they commit are every bit as heinous as adults.
However, juveniles do not have the same physical and mental condition as the adults, therefore, the punishment would not have much effect on them. For some of them, meanwhile, they do not have adequate endurance so that the penalty may destroy their whole life and future. Additionally, there is much greater possibility for them to reestablish the value, return to normal life and even shift gear to become the leader of certain area. Compared with adult criminals, the young ones are more capable of learning from their mistakes.Once they understand the consequences of their behaviour and the desired goal of their life, they would rehabilitate much faster.
In conclusion, I believe that naive and young as criminals are, for the sake the long-term social benefit, rigorous education and chances should be offered to young offenders. However, if only they commit crimes again, there is no excuse for them to escape from the equivalent penalty as adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15172413793 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66035320802 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572413793103 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1867314503 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.923076923 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185588322443 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612584154203 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410935935653 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105567356971 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561809386988 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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