Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The writer of the argument concludes that the so-called Palean baskets were not peerlessly Palean; however, this conclusion cannot be accepted as it is in that it rests on a number of premises all of which can be challenged in one way or another.
The first issue with the argument is that the writer assumes that archaeologists discovered such a Palean basket in Lithos; however, there is no evidence to illustrate Palean people did not live there or not travel there. For instance, maybe a Palean family immigrated to Lithos and it is their job to made this kind of baskets and sell them in order to had income. Or maybe, Palean people had traveled there and put their staffs in baskets and left them behind and turned back. Hence, it did not prove that Palean people did not make these baskets.
Another problem with the argument is that the writer proposes that the Brim river is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Palean could not have passed it. However, there is no testament to definitely show that this is the case. Perhaps the river was shallow and inhabitants could cross by foot; since that time, as far as water is a dynamic steam, it erodes the ground’s river and makes it deep. Or Maybe there were not a river at all and just one territory had been existed which a natural phenomenon like an earthquake had occurred and water passed it. Therefore, by appearing the river, the area had divided into 2 separately territories.
A third matter with the problem is that the writer presumes that Palean people were able to cross the river just by boats and claims that no Palean boats have been found. However, there is no document to prove that there were only boats for transporting. As far as these baskets belong to the ancient village named Palean. It comes to my mind that maybe folks of the village had supernatural features, like crows which could carry heavy things, and they could send their objects with them to wherever they love to, like Lithos. With consideration to it, boats existences were not indispensable. Or Perhaps, even without believe in supernatural things, boats had existed, but not like the boats we are imagine. It could be possible that Palean boats had made of decomposed materials like leaves, woods, and etc., that it led to leave no vestige behind them. Also, even their used material had not decomposed, perhaps a catastrophic had happened which had devastated every single thing.
In the final analysis, the writer’s conclusion cannot be taken to be right because, as it was shown in the body paragraphs above, it depends on a number of assumptions each of which is questionable. The conclusion can only be accepted if the weaknesses already referred to are all effaced.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 474 350
No. of Characters: 2192 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.666 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.624 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.444 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.985 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The writer of the argument concludes tha...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n be challenged in one way or another. The first issue with the argument is tha...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ean people did not make these baskets. Another problem with the argument is tha...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ivided into 2 separately territories. A third matter with the problem is that ...
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Line 4, column 259, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...there were only boats for transporting. As far as these baskets belong to the anci...
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Line 4, column 705, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'imagined'.
Suggestion: imagined
... existed, but not like the boats we are imagine. It could be possible that Palean boats...
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Line 4, column 806, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ecomposed materials like leaves, woods, and etc., that it led to leave no vestige behind...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ich had devastated every single thing. In the final analysis, the writer's...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, third, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2263.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 474.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77426160338 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57303456316 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46835443038 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.14542917 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.15 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153712221253 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516977505124 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439372919977 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806025519494 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342975398998 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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