Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed
undoubtedly, education plays the most fundamental role in every society and also in people's life.Educational centers have wide range of responsibilities toward their students.Some people claim that these organization should guide the educational path of students by discouraging them from studying in a field that seems unsuitable for them.I disagree with this viewpoint. In my opinion, institutions have other important duties, and intervening in people's choices would bring detrimental effect on both sides.
Identifying whether a field is appropriate for a person or not is not a simple job.It requires meticulous surveys on the person and that would not even give a definite answer .Dissuading a student from his favorite field may weaken his morale and lead to severe detachment from studying. Furthermore, predicting about the future of a student is not a reasonable job. every individual's success depends on his or her hardwork and planning.It is plausible that an inappropriate field of study from the view point of teachers turn to be the right one in the long term.On top of that, students should be granted the opportunity to experience and decide autonomously in order to be independent individuals in the future and accept the consequence of their decisions.
having said that,some institutions have professional consulting programs which can grant beneficial results.For example, a person who is ambivalent about choosing a major can benefit alot from impartial evaluation and counseling of knowledeable people.Centers which assess the weakness and strong feature of a pupil can be valid sources for depending on and taking advice.Additionally, these centers can prevent a student from wasting time while hesitating on adopting a major and instead guide her towar the suitable field.Consequently, these students take advantage from scientific advices and their path is paved for future progress and achievemnt by cleaner state of mind.
In summary, although dissuading people may seem advantageous at surface, but the demerits of this decision overshadows its benefits.By interfering in people's personal decisions we prevent the from developing indepedent personalities and distort their mind about their dreamed future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, may, so, while, for example, in summary, in my opinion, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 338.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67455621302 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34366651127 2.79657885939 120% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60650887574 0.4932671777 123% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 23.0359550562 208% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 181.312448777 60.3974514979 300% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 274.0 118.986275619 230% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.2857142857 23.4991977007 205% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.0 5.21951772744 307% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 7.80617977528 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266289510586 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109800269094 0.0831039109588 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057464816059 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144840482256 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626426197384 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.4 14.1392134831 208% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 5.84 48.8420337079 12% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.92365168539 201% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 12.1743820225 200% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.49 12.1639044944 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.34 8.38706741573 135% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.5 11.8971910112 181% => OK
gunning_fog: 21.2 11.2143820225 189% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 11.7820224719 187% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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