An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
In response to vitamin A deficiency among the impoverished nation of Tagus, an international development organization suggests that the government of Tagus should do everything they can to promote a new type of millet that is high in vitamin A engineered by the organization. The organization comes to this conclusion based on the assumption that in order to counter the deficiency of vitamin A, consumption of this new breed of millet will benefit the citizens greatly. However, the author hasn't provided any cogent scrutiny for the argument, hence, in order to further properly evaluate the argument made by the author, three questions must be answered.
Firstly, the question arises whether the only way to eradicate the deficiency in vitamin A is to engineer a new breed of millet? In addition to this would this method be efficient enough? It is possible that there are many other techniques by which the government would counter this problem. Rather than just introducing a new breed of millet, the international development organization could provide funding to the government of Tagus so that they could provide supplies that are rich in vitamin A and various other nutrients. This would surely soothe the current situation of the country. Furthermore, it might be possible that the root cause of vitamin A deficiency has raised since the majority of the populace is poor and cannot afford nutrient-rich food. If either of these statements holds true, the argument made by the international organization would be weakened significantly.
Secondly, since the millets cost more, the cost at which it is being sold might also be high. Therefore it is possible that though the farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet, the overall cost of farming would surpass the budget that would in turn result into rise of the crop price. If this happens then the people of the impoverished nation of Tagus would not be able to purchase the crop and the assumption of the organization would be broken down. In addition to this, there is a probability that the demand for the previous millet would increase, but due to the decreased supply of it, the prices of the millet would also increase. This would be deleterious for the overall health of the citizens since they would shift to some other cheaper source of food that might not be rich in nutrients. Hence, if the above statements are true then the argument would not hold water.
Thirdly, though millet is a staple food in Tagus, it is possible that a major part of the population doesn't consume it. There is a possibility that miller is popular in only a few parts of the country, hence changing the breed of the millet would not affect the overall health of the country. In addition to this, engineering a new breed may result in changes in the methods of farming. This change in the traditional method of farming may not be adopted by all farmers though they are paid subsidies. This would imply that the production of the new type of millet would not increase drastically and would not be consumed by the citizens on a large scale. Therefore, it would have next to no effect on the issue of vitamin A deficiency. If this would be true, the recommendation for supplanting the original breed of millet with a new breed would be irrelevant and weakened significantly.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the above three questions and offer more evidence, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed suggestion to encourage the consumption of the new type of millet engineered by the international development organization.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 635 350
No. of Characters: 3062 1500
No. of Different Words: 242 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.02 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.822 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.809 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 211 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 159 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 113 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.612 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.76 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.489 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
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Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ch it is being sold might also be high. Therefore it is possible that though the farmers ...
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Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ble that a major part of the population doesnt consume it. There is a possibility that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 34.0 12.9520958084 263% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 55.5748502994 162% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 16.3942115768 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3134.0 2260.96107784 139% => OK
No of words: 633.0 441.139720559 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95102685624 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01592376844 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87410704458 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 204.123752495 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404423380727 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 983.7 705.55239521 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4624721989 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.36 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.32 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454802206121 0.218282227539 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134477641395 0.0743258471296 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10881500546 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283705070406 0.128457276422 221% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980284594903 0.0628817314937 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 98.500998004 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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