In recent year sports stars have become increasingly famous and wealthy. For some this is a benefit, raising the profile of sports, but for others it is a negative influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many people argue that sports stars boost their well-known and become richer, this statement brings a variety of merits, so does disadvantages. In my opinion, I strongly agree that there are a lot of benefits and my opinion will be discussed in further paragraphs with a suitable conclusion.
On the one hand, there is a range of reasons why this notion is an advantage. The first reason is that their country might increase tourists because their fans can go to their lives to face to face with them. Or through some videos advertising about some landmarks, historical places, just fans see their idols in those, as a result, the number of viewers witnessed an upward trend and it helps spread the magnificent sceneries of the country which sports stars living. Therefore, it attracts millions of people might have a trip to their country. In addition, with their remuneration so high, they often use a part of it to volunteer for some homeless people, disabled person,.... , contribute to develop a society better for people in difficult situations. For example, Mbapbe( dbt ten dau) spent all his salaries in 2 months for children living in Africa.
On the other hand, this notion has many kinds of downwards. The important reason is that if sports stars tend to rose their well-known, they can distract in their work. They attend many events, advertisements,..., consequently, they are not enough time to practice and improve their skill in sports which leads to a reducing in their achievement. For example, a research showed that 10% of sports players declined their skills after becoming famous.
In conclusion, sports stars, which are more famous and wealthy day in day, have various of merits for community. I believe that aforementioned points are strongly supporting my viewpointview point.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 182, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'to face'.
Suggestion: to face
...ecause their fans can go to their lives to face to face with them. Or through some videos adver...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...or some homeless people, disabled person,.... , contribute to develop a society be...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...me homeless people, disabled person,.... , contribute to develop a society better ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
... They attend many events, advertisements,..., consequently, they are not enough ti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08080808081 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8536613641 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612794612795 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0349535196 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.6 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.13333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236298001539 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780069635178 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520582227114 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145588404926 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0053431952486 0.056905535591 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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