Some people say that devoting one's time to family activities is more important than spending time working. Others believe that dedicating one's time to work is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some people think that the time a person spends working is more beneficial than he time he or she spends interacting with their family. However, there is a more persuasive argument that devoting time to family is important as both individuals and families are far happier when they have more time together.
On the one hand, working is essential to ensure family’s financial wellbeing. Because if a worker cannot make a living, the overall happiness of his or her family cannot be ensured. Therefore, most people must commit much of their lives to their careers. For example, parents sometimes miss out on events in their children’s lives, but this does indicate that they are uninterested in their family. It is simply a trade-off they must make. In order to be able to afford their children’s education, parents must work long hours that sometimes separate them from their families. It’s a sacrifice for the family’s overall happiness and success.
Nevertheless, spending time for family is more valuable because it contributes more in individual’s family’s happiness. Family time is usually fun and relaxing, while work time is stressful. According to the Centre for Family Development, the majority of respondents ranked family time over work when asked about the things that brought the most satisfaction to their lives. Also, when asked separately whether being with their family and being at work were positive or negative experiences, an overwhelming 85 percent responded that they always enjoy the time that they spend with their families, while over 60 percent claimed to experience more stress than pleasure at their jobs.
To sum up, while it is apparent that time used for working is sometimes more crucial than family time, it is undeniable that enjoying time with family is generally more important and should be prioritized.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, while, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23411371237 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76429042458 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5810926342 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.785714286 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3571428571 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368633431835 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145424763937 0.084324248473 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128670722734 0.0667982634062 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285512709197 0.151304729494 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13967180243 0.056905535591 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, while, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23411371237 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76429042458 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5810926342 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.785714286 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3571428571 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368633431835 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145424763937 0.084324248473 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128670722734 0.0667982634062 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285512709197 0.151304729494 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13967180243 0.056905535591 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.